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Post  Mona Fri Aug 17, 2012 11:50 pm

a jumped-up Ministry official trying

I like it, Verity! Smile
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Post  Verity Weasley Sat Aug 18, 2012 1:25 am

to run the school before.

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Post  Potteraholic Sat Aug 18, 2012 4:24 pm

Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 Outsta10     "

Dolores coughed, then said, "Griselda                   


I wonder what ol' Dolly thinks about that. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 464751818

So, does anyone have any suggestions about where this exchange between Griselda and Dolores leads to? Will there be any 'action' in this story, or will it remain dialogue-based? In terms of the time frame of this story, it happens after ch. 31 in OoTP but before ch. 32, which are summarized by the Lexicon thus:


Ch. 31 - In which Harry and Hermione tell Ron about Grawp, the fifth years take their O.W.L.s, Hagrid is sacked, McGonagall is stunned, and Harry dreams that Sirius is being tortured.

Ch. 32 - In which Ron, Hermione, Neville, and Luna help Harry break into Umbridge's office, Kreacher leads Harry to believe that Sirius is at the Department of Mysteries, and Hermione tricks Umbridge into taking her and Harry into the Forbidden Forest.

So would Minnie McG's stunning already have happened while our story is taking place, and Griselda is marking exam papers? Would she know about it? Would she and Dolly discuss it now, maybe?

I'm asking because I want to get a sense of the time frame, so it can guide the progress of this story.

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Post  Verity Weasley Sat Aug 18, 2012 8:51 pm

, these are extenuating circumstances. Dumbledore

I've been thinking about our timeline too. I fear we have written ourselves into a bit of a tight spot. The exam answers we were quoting earlier sounded very much like History of Magic, but now that Umbridge has arrived on the scene, this can't really be after that exam. Harry collapsed towards the end of that exam, then straight after it told Ron and Ginny what he'd seen. Their plan to break into Umbridge's office to use her fireplace swung into motion very quickly after that, involving Ron luring her away but ultimately ended with Umbridge catching them all. So when Griselda is marking those papers, if they are History of Magic papers, Umbridge should be threatening Harry in her office, or being carried away by the Centaurs. Unless, this all takes place in that 30 minutes or so after the end of the exam, in which case we could signal that by having Ron turn up to tell Umbridge that Peeves was smashing up the Transfiguration department. I suppose that could be feasible.

If that's the case, we can continue our brief exchange between Dolly (what a highly inappropriate nickname for such an unpleasant person! Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 1003735042 ) and Griselda, then have Ron turn up to provide a nice climax for the story. I'm thinking Dolly might start to get a bit defensive and give up trying to be smarmy to Griselda and bring up her ties to subversive goblin groups. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 2752390508
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Post  Potteraholic Sat Aug 18, 2012 10:05 pm

Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 Outsta10     has exposed the students here                    ... to something or the other. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 464751818

Thanks for checking up on the exact timeline, Verity. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 2752390508 What I forgot to mention in my long post above — I could've sworn it written it, though — was that I didn't have my books handy to check for myself. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 1205762161

Verity, I think your suggestion is the best way to go.


"So when Griselda is marking those papers, if they are History of Magic papers, Umbridge should be threatening Harry in her office, or being carried away by the Centaurs. Unless, this all takes place in that 30 minutes or so after the end of the exam, in which case we could signal that by having Ron turn up to tell Umbridge that Peeves was smashing up the Transfiguration department. I suppose that could be feasible." ~ Verity

We are at roughly just under 750 words. This story would be a good candidate for a length of 1,000 to 1,100 words. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 2752390508

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Post  Verity Weasley Sat Aug 18, 2012 10:17 pm

to dangerous and subversive ideas

PAH, that sounds like a good suggested length for this story. Now I have the books on my kindle, it makes it super easy to look stuff up and check details. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 2752390508
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Post  Mona Sun Aug 19, 2012 11:29 pm

. Just look at the way

Some mention of Dumbledore's Army, perhaps? Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 2045820042

I too like Verity's suggestion, if I've got it right. So Ron will come and interrupt them after a while, right?
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Post  Verity Weasley Sun Aug 19, 2012 11:44 pm

that Potter boy tried to

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Post  Mona Mon Aug 20, 2012 6:09 am

de-stabilise the Ministry with

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Post  Verity Weasley Mon Aug 20, 2012 6:22 am

these fanciful stories of He

Mona, de-stabilise counts as one word, so you only had four in your last post.
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Post  Mona Mon Aug 20, 2012 10:46 pm

Who Must Not Be Named returning

Oops! Six words this time.
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Post  Verity Weasley Tue Aug 21, 2012 8:43 am

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"But he is back. Dumbledore


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Post  Mona Tue Aug 21, 2012 11:33 pm

believes Potter, and that's good

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Post  Verity Weasley Wed Aug 22, 2012 1:24 am

enough for me," stated Griselda
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Post  Potteraholic Wed Aug 22, 2012 7:32 pm

Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVII) - Page 21 Outsta10     quietly, fixing Dolores with a                   

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Post  Verity Weasley Wed Aug 22, 2012 7:42 pm

steely gaze. Dolores blinked and

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Post  Julia H. Fri Aug 24, 2012 4:36 pm

instinctively took a step back

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Post  Verity Weasley Fri Aug 24, 2012 8:47 pm

but quickly recovered her composure.

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Post  Julia H. Sat Aug 25, 2012 4:30 am

"This attitude only goes to

... prove

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Post  Verity Weasley Sat Aug 25, 2012 4:46 am

show that the Daily Prophet

...was right

PAH, have you started back at school yet? How is everything?
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Post  Julia H. Sat Aug 25, 2012 5:11 am

was right," she replied. "Your
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Post  Verity Weasley Sat Aug 25, 2012 5:37 am

judgement has been impaired since

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Post  Julia H. Sat Aug 25, 2012 6:08 am

you began associating with goblins
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Post  Verity Weasley Sat Aug 25, 2012 6:24 am

. It's no wonder the Wizengamot
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Post  Julia H. Sat Aug 25, 2012 7:48 am

was happy to get rid

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