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Post  Verity Weasley on Sat Feb 09, 2013 5:26 am

. Now a great weight had

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Post  Julia H. on Sat Feb 09, 2013 5:36 am

been lifted from his shoulders

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Post  Verity Weasley on Sat Feb 09, 2013 7:20 am

and he was suddenly filled

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Post  Julia H. on Sun Feb 10, 2013 5:35 am

with a sense of relief

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Post  Verity Weasley on Sun Feb 10, 2013 6:26 am

and another unfamiliar feeling - hope.

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Post  Julia H. on Sun Feb 10, 2013 8:41 am

Harry had believed him - forgiven

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Post  Verity Weasley on Sun Feb 10, 2013 9:19 am

him for failing to save

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Post  Julia H. on Sun Feb 10, 2013 9:41 am

his parents. Remus was his

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Post  Verity Weasley on Sun Feb 10, 2013 10:55 am

friend again, and there was

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Post  Julia H. on Sun Feb 10, 2013 11:32 am

also Dumbledore, who had seemed

Sirius may not know that Dumbledore played a part in his escape, but they talked at least, and he may have realized that Dumbledore was on his side.

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Post  Verity Weasley on Mon Feb 11, 2013 9:36 am

to believe trust him. The future

Edit: I hope PAH is OK. It's not unusual for Mona to be absent for long chunks of time (although she did make that New Year's Resolution! ), but it's not like PAH to be gone this long. I hope everything is OK.


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Post  Julia H. on Wed Feb 13, 2013 6:53 pm

certainly looked a bit brighter

I, too, hope that both of them are OK.

Verity, would you read the last few sentences again? We repeat "believed him" in a way that I don't really like stylistically. What do you think?

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Post  Verity Weasley on Wed Feb 13, 2013 7:45 pm

than it had for a

Yes, I agree. That second 'seemed to believe him' should probably be changed. I'll give it some thought, as nothing is coming to me right now. It's easy to miss those kinds of things when it takes us a week or more to write one sentence!

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Post  Julia H. on Fri Feb 15, 2013 12:02 pm

long time.

The night was


Yes, Verity, just as I thought.

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Post  Verity Weasley on Fri Feb 15, 2013 8:47 pm

beginning to lighten, a faint

Julia, I have changed the word 'believe' in my earlier post to 'trust'. It was the only word I could think of without having to add extra words.

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Post  Julia H. on Sat Feb 16, 2013 5:59 am

glow of yellow and pink

I think "trust" is good.

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Post  Verity Weasley on Sat Feb 16, 2013 6:16 am

on the distant horizon.

"Time


Sirius talking to Buckbeak. I'm thinking he'll want to take shelter during the day for safety.

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Post  Julia H. on Sat Feb 16, 2013 8:17 am

to take a bit of

... rest?

Yes, and they'll also need to eat and perhaps sleep a little, especially Buckbeak. I wonder where they are now.

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Post  Verity Weasley on Sat Feb 16, 2013 11:42 am

a rest, old mate," Sirius

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Post  Julia H. on Sat Feb 16, 2013 12:37 pm

murmured, bending over the hippogriff's

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Post  Verity Weasley on Sat Feb 16, 2013 9:40 pm

muscular neck. A dense forest

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Post  Julia H. on Sun Feb 17, 2013 7:11 am

appeared below, and Buckbeak gracefully

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Post  Verity Weasley on Sun Feb 17, 2013 7:32 am

circled down, alighting in a

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Post  Julia H. on Sun Feb 17, 2013 8:00 am

small glade. Sirius glanced round

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Post  Verity Weasley on Sun Feb 17, 2013 11:12 am

before sliding from the Hippogriff's

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