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  mona amon   39
  Julia H.   4
  Potteraholic   94
  Puck   6
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Total Words: 1210
Last Submission Date: #1250, Oct 7, 2010, 4:28 am, (Potteraholic)
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Potty Five Words: "The Clean Half-Dozen: Saving Daniel Radcliffe"

This story was written from September 25, 2010 to October 7, 2010. Six writers contributed to the story, which is 1,475 words long. Three of the six writers posted feedback

- Potteraholic, Oct 9, 2010 2:40 am: Story #129 is up! I liked it, but I did find the fight scene a litle tricky as I had a hard time imagining the staging of it and deciding which spells to use. What did you think of the story?

- Verity Weasley, Oct 9, 2010 3:52 am: I think we did a pretty good job with the last story. Action scenes are always difficult to write. It is difficult to build a sense of tension when a single spell can overcome an opponent. I could picture the scene quite clearly in my head, but that didn't seem to make it easier to write! There were a few issues that probably needed a bit more explanation, like why the Prewett twins had to walk up to the castle to see Dumbledore. You would think in times of great crisis that they had worked out some more effective methods of communication, but we know so little about that time. Never mind. There were some good exchanges (I especially like the image of the Marauders hanging curtains), and I think the dialogue was in character. The bold, gung ho attitude of the Marauders came through, and I liked John's contribution of the impromptu sand table. Overall, not a bad effort.

- mona amon, Oct 9, 2010 8:31 pm: I thought the last story turned out very well. I didn't have high hopes for it with the DEs being so outnumbered by the Order members, but we managed to make it interesting. And that's what's so fascinating about 5 Words. You start off with something and it just evolves into something quite different and unexpected. OK, I don't think I'm explaining myself very well, but regular 5 Worders will know what I mean. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2222139670






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Potty Five Words: "Bill and Fleur's Wedding: The Deleted Scenes"


Bill and Fleur were gliding around the dance floor, as every eye followed them.

"Don't zey make such a lovely couple?" Gabrielle sighed, nudging one of her cousins.

Luna, standing nearby, agreed. "Yes, they both have small ears, good for preventing Wrackspurt infestation. They won't need siphons!" Gabrielle looked confused, prompting Luna to add, "but your sister's dress is so beautiful. It reminds me of a moonlit Norwegian Silver-nosed Albatross. Daddy and I spotted one once, many years ago."

"Zat eez very interesting," Gabrielle remarked politely. "Eet must 'ave been very beautiful, zen. Please excuse me, Luna," she said, and soon disappeared into the crowd.

Fred and George were standing next to Hagrid, who was tapping his foot loudly, and not always in time to the music. Fred gave George a nudge and said, "Fancy a dance, Hagrid?"

Hagrid chuckled. "Not righ' now," he said, "but I did promise yer Mum a dance later on." Leaving Hagrid to his foot-tapping, the twins made their way towards a group of French girls who were giggling together near a floating bottle of champagne, glasses in hand. The bottle was refilling their glasses as soon as they got empty.

"Steady on, mademoiselles!" Fred cautioned. "You should be careful with that stuff, or it'll go straight to your heads!"

"Oh là là! You are a cheeky one!" laughed the tallest of the bunch. "Per'aps you wish eet to go to our 'eads, Monsieur Weasley."

"Monsieur Weasley is my father. I'm Fred, and this is George —"

"His much handsomer brother," said George, bowing with an elaborate flourish. "May I have this dance, mademoiselle?" Fred followed suit, and soon the twins were doing a brisk foxtrot on the gleaming, golden dance floor, expertly twirling and dipping their partners.

An aroma filled the air: sweet honeysuckle, fragrant roses, and lavender mingled with the scent of the hors d'oeuvres carried around by white-robed waiters. A scowling Viktor Krum watched the twins continuing to charm Fleur's cousins with their humorous antics, but then he smiled immediately when he saw Hermione sitting alone at a nearby table. He started walking towards her, but was stopped by Xenophilius Lovegood, who had been dancing backwards amongst the other guests. Xenophilius was hard to miss in his bright yellow robes, but there was one item in particular that drew Viktor's attention. As Xenophilius turned to wave to some friends, something glinted, briefly.

Viktor stopped suddenly, his eyes on the strange triangular symbol gleaming on Xenophilius's chest. "Vot —"

"Sorry, old chap," interrupted Xenophilius cheerfully, as he continued to practice his Moonwalk. "Didn't mean to bump into you." He waltzed away to join a group of older witches and warlocks seated near the band, leaving Viktor staring after him, a frown on his face.

Before he could react, Gabrielle grabbed him by the hand and said, "Come on, Viktor! Let's dance!"

Uncreasing his forehead, Viktor followed the lively girl to the middle of the dance floor, where he temporarily forgot about cross-eyed wizards.

"Make way! Make way!" trilled Auntie Muriel loudly. "Look sharp! I need to get through!" She crossed the dance floor hobbling a little, a goblet of champagne in one hand.

The dancers parted before her hastily, and she made her way to a table with a good view of the wedding cake. "I'm 107, you know."

"I didn't," Tonks said, smiling. She looked very lovely in a cream chiffon dress, which complemented her newly blonde hair perfectly. "You don't look a day over 106!" she added, with a grin.

Muriel looked at her, nonplussed at first, then she started cackling. She wagged her finger and said, "You've got some fire in your belly, you have. And judging by your glow, I'd say that's not all you've got in there!" She winked conspiratorially at Remus, who was sitting next to her. He smiled feebly and shrugged.

Tonks beamed at Muriel but put her finger to her lips.

"Oh, never you fear, dear,” Muriel said. "Your secret's safe with me. I'm the soul of discretion. Ask anybody." She looked around at the nearby guests to see if anyone had heard them and spotted Molly at the next table. "Well, almost anyone." A crooked grin split her lined face and she chuckled heartily, much to Tonks' amusement and Remus' discomfort. She inched closer to Tonks. "Did you see Harry Potter anywhere today? I heard he was supposed to be coming... good friends with the youngest Weasleys, apparently."

"No, I haven't seen him," Tonks replied nonchalantly. "Now, isn't that a beautiful cake?"

Muriel turned to admire the towering confection covered in delicate golden icing, festooned with an assortment of sugared violets and adorned with two beautiful model phoenixes. "Oh, look," Muriel said, "they're getting ready to cut the cake."

Bill and Fleur were holding an elaborately engraved silver knife, and approached the cake, smiling at each other. They waited until all the assembled guests were quiet before they proceeded to make the first cut. The model phoenixes shimmered, then became animated and flew off their perch atop the cake. Everyone clapped and cheered as the crimson and gold pair soared into the cerulean blue sky, over the heads of the delighted guests. It was only a few minutes before the cake was magically cut into enough pieces for all the guests.

Going back for seconds, Ron and Charlie ran into Viktor. Charlie began to compliment Viktor on his Quidditch successes. "Those last few catches you made were spectacular, weren't they Ron? Ron!"

"What? Yeah, fantastic," he mumbled. "Sorry, but Hermione's waiting for me," he said, backing away hurriedly, bumping into the small, tufty-haired wizard who had conducted the ceremony.

"So, they are together, then, your brother and Hermione?" Viktor inquired.

"What, Ron and Hermione? I think they're just good friends... all three of them, you know, with Harry Potter."

"I can't see Harry Potter anyvhere. Is he here?"

"Mmmm, no, I don't think so," Charlie began. "We haven't heard from him in a while."

"Charlie!" called a demanding voice.

"Quick!" Charlie urged Viktor. "This way! I can't talk to Auntie Muriel now! He hurriedly led them towards the opposite side of the dance floor.

"So, you don't think they're anything more than friends then?" Viktor asked hopefully, as they reached their destination.

"What?" Charlie asked, looking back to make sure Auntie Muriel wasn't pursuing him. "Look, you'll have to ask them," Charlie explained. "I haven't been around much, so I don't know what's going on, to be honest."

"Oh, vere have you been?" Viktor asked.

"Romania, mostly, but sometimes we make trips to other countries. I work with dragons, you see," Charlie explained.

"Ah, yes. Hermione told me, after the first task ended, that you vere in Hogvarts, handling the dragons. I vill never forget facing that dragon. I vish I vas as resourceful as Harry had been vith his broom. He is a good flier, very skilled. And a talented vizard. I thought I vould meet him here. I vanted to...never mind."

Charlie was about to ask Viktor to join him and Hagrid for a drink, but he was momentarily distracted by Xenophilius, who was now teaching the younger guests an elaborate hand-clapping routine.

"Excuse me," said Viktor abruptly to Charlie, turning to address Xenophilius. "Could I have a vord?"

"But of course my dear chap," Xenophilius responded. "I don't know your name, though. I'm Xenophilius Lovegood," he said, offering his hand.

"Viktor Krum," replied Viktor, not offering his in return.

"Vy do you vear the mark of Grindelvald? There," Viktor said, pointing to Xenophilius' chest, where the strange triangular symbol gleamed in the light from the floating lanterns.

Xenophilius' smile disappeared. "Mark of Grindelwald? Nonsense! This, young man, is the sign of the Deathly Hallows, one of my country's greatest legends. I don't suppose you've heard of them?"

"No, but I do know that mark was carved into a vall at Durmstrang, and everybody knew it vas the mark of Gellert Grindelvald! Surely you heard of how terrible he vas? How many he tortured and murdered? My grandfather told me —"

"My dear boy, I can assure you—"

"He vos in the resistance movement that fought against Grindelvald!" Viktor insisted, "And he vos killed, like countless others!"

Xenophilius was taken aback by Viktor's intensity. "Now see here, Viktor, is it? I don't know what you're talking about, but it seems that Grindelwald has sullied the true meaning of this symbol. Let me explain."

"I have no time for such nonsense. Explanations? Pah! I'll appreciate it if you keep your symbol to yourself!"

Viktor stormed off, leaving Xenophilius perplexed. He shook his head sadly. "Some people have such closed minds," he muttered to himself with annoyance.

"This has been a lovely wedding," Luna said, appearing at her father's side. "Nothing could ruin it."

A few minutes later, gasps filled the air as a silver streak landed suddenly and proved otherwise.






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  Verity Weasley   84
  mona amon   44
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Total Submissions: 212
Total Words: 1484
Last Submission Date: #1471, Oct 30, 2010, 5:11 am, (Potteraholic)
Total Time to Create Story: 21 days, 2 hours, 31 minutes






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Post-Story Comments for Story #111, Volume XIII,
Potty Five Words: "Bill and Fleur's Wedding: The Deleted Scenes"

This story was written from October 9, 2010 to October 30, 2010. Four writers contributed to the story, which is 1,484 words long. Three of the six writers posted feedback, and one non-participant also posted her thoughts.

- Potteraholic, Nov 6, 2010 3:23 am: This story was fun to write. I enjoyed the sections with Fred and George and Great Auntie Muriel the most, and I think we got the characterizations right, for all the characters, for the most part.

While I was formatting the story to post it, I had the idea that I would include JKR's text in italics preceding and following certain sections with ... [CUT]... inserted to show how our story connected into the existing chapter, but it didn't flow well because our timeline was a bit out of step with hers. I think our story is a strong one, though, and stands alone well on its own. It just got me thinking, what if we were to write another 'Deleted Scenes' story? One that really did try to interweave what we imagine happened off-camera with what actually made it into the published books? I think it might be fun to try that sometime and see what we come up with. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2752390508

- Verity Weasley, Nov 6, 2010 4:38 am: Anyway, the last story did turn out well and I think it was a good idea to try a 'deleted scenes' type story, but it was sometimes difficult to remember the details of the wedding as it happened in the book so we didn't trip ourselves up. Auntie Muriel was great fun to write and I agree that her sections are some of the strongest. I also loved the touches of humour from Luna and Xeno, and I thought the segments with Viktor also turned out well, once we got the hang of 'Viktor-speak!' I know I got tripped up on that a few times. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 1437562208

- Julia H., Nov 7, 2010 4:10 pm: Hi! I really like your last story! Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2752390508 The list of participants may be short, but here is a reader who enjoyed reading the story!

- mona amon, Nov 7, 2010 7:35 pm: The deleted wedding scenes story turned out very well. I think the three of us did a good job. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 464751818

I can just imagine, if someone from a foreign country were to walk into say, Swastik Stores out here [India], the conversation would go pretty much like the one between Xeno and Victor. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2222139670






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Potty Five Words: "Harry’s First Birthday"


"Look! It's a toy broomstick!" Lily smiled and showed James the present that Harry had received from his godfather.

"I wonder what gave Sirius the idea to get him that?" James mused, smiling to himself.

"Oh, right! As if you didn't know!" Lily laughed. "You told him to get it because you're convinced he's going to be the best Seeker Gryffindor ever had!"

"Well," James began, "I might've said something to Sirius about hoping that he'd be a good flier... but I'd be a tough act to follow, wouldn't I?"

Lily laughed, and Harry giggled as she kissed him and said, "Let's see what other presents you've got, my little munchkin. See? This one's from Mummy and Daddy. Want to see what it can do?" Lily placed a brightly wrapped box into Harry's tiny hands and he ripped the paper eagerly.

Zerbinetta, Lily's black cat, pounced on a discarded piece of red and gold wrapping while little Harry tried to open the box. At last, with some help from Lily, he pulled off the lid. Out flew a toy snowy owl, which swooped around the room, while Zerbinetta followed the fast-moving object with keen interest.

Harry stood on tiptoes, but the owl was out of reach, and he soon turned his attention to the toy his godfather had sent him. He crawled off Lily's lap and took a shaky step toward the miniature Nimbus that was exactly like his father's, only half its size. He stumbled, but James caught him just in time. Harry wriggled and squirmed in his father's grasp and reached for the broomstick.

"He's walking," Lily whispered.

"He wants to fly!" laughed James.

Indeed, as soon as James released Harry, he toddled over to the broom and grabbed it. The parents exchanged an apprehensive glance and James drew closer to the child. Harry climbed on quickly and with a beaming face, he started walking quickly away from Lily and James.

Suddenly the little broom lifted a few inches off the floor. Harry squealed with laughter as the broom took off after the cat.

"Be careful, darling!" Lily said.

The toy snowy owl, meanwhile, landed on another of Harry's presents, then zoomed upwards again. Harry, noticing this immediately, set off in pursuit, laughing excitedly. He leaned forward and grabbed at it, catching it in midair.

"GRYFFINDOR WINS!!!" James cheered, rushing up to give Harry a hug.

Lily was smiling, remembering the first time she discovered she could float off the playground swing seat into the air, free as a bird, all those years ago. She must have been six or seven years old. Her sister, Petunia, had left her alone on the swings to take a closer look at some girls skipping rope at the far end of the playground. It happened suddenly. Her hands let go of the chains and she tipped forward, but instead of falling down, she soared upwards and then slowly floated down to the ground. She looked around to see if anyone had noticed her. The only other person there was the groundskeeper, who did not pay much attention to her. She had been just as excited as Harry was now.

"My turn," she said, reaching for her son and giving him a kiss. Two pairs of green eyes met, shining with enthusiasm, and Lily thought she should capture this moment on film.

When she returned with the camera, she saw Harry had knocked the ugly vase Petunia had given them for Christmas off its shelf. James was ready to say "Reparo!", but Lily stopped him. "Don't bother, sweetheart. I never liked that thing, anyway."

James grinned and said, "Whatever you say, Lil'."

Lily shrugged. The vase reminded her of how strained her relationship with Petunia was and how insufferable her husband Vernon could be. They had not even visited them once since Harry's birth, nor had they ever invited them to see their son. Sending the vase had been a perfunctory courtesy that Petunia had performed in lieu of visiting her for Christmas, as Lily had suggested.

Vernon turned her away, in the rudest possible manner, last year when she tried to visit Petunia in the hospital - Lily, nearly eight months pregnant - when Dudley was born. James, with Dumbledore's help, had even managed to have a Ministry car take her there. It had been a lot of trouble for nothing, and James had become so angry that he wanted to visit Vernon and teach him a lesson, but Lily had stopped him.

"One potent Bat-Bogey Hex would put him in his place!" James had declared, much to Lily's amusement.

A shriek of delight brought Lily out of her reminiscence. Zerbinetta streaked past trailing silver ribbons as Harry stepped off his broom. Lily picked up the camera and set it hovering in front of the fireplace. She called James and Harry over to sit down by her side then waved her wand with a flourish.

"Activare!" Lily sang, and the camera started clicking away.

"Now, how 'bout another present?" James suggested, grinning mysteriously.

"Here's one, from Alice and Frank!" Lily exclaimed, holding up a garishly wrapped parcel with a profusion of bows. "Augusta must've wrapped this," Lily mused. Then, frowning slightly, she said, "I hope little Neville liked our gift."

"What little boy wouldn't like a set of true to life toy dragons? Even the safer, non fire-breathing ones?"

"I'm still not sure," Lily worried, "but at least he won't get burned."

Harry was intrigued by the colorful contents of the Longbottoms' gift. They were building blocks, which could be arranged into the shapes of houses, castles and bridges with just a wave of a hand. It was amazing to see them transform under Harry's little fingers.

"What a lovely gift! And look how much Harry likes it! That Alice... she's so thoughtful. I remember when we were taking antenatal classes together at St. Mungo's, she always had a freshly baked rhubarb crumble waiting when we got back to her place, near the hospital. She remembered it was my favorite sort of crumble—" Lily broke off with a sigh, wishing she had one right now.

"Well," James began, with a chuckle, "we don't have any rhubarb crumble, but we do have a gorgeous birthday cake!"

"Thanks to Batty and her baking spells... I don't know what I'd have done without her help."

Harry knocked over his pile of blocks, which he had stacked carefully in a tower formation, but before he had time to start crying, James picked him up and took him over to the couch, where he began tickling him. Harry's giggles filled the air, making Lily smile.

Having Harry is an absolute joy, Lily thought, I'm so glad we didn't wait to have him even though Voldemort's causing such trouble these days.

"We are safe here," James said, correctly interpreting his wife's pensive look. They smiled at each other fondly as Harry wriggled and squirmed between them. At that moment, there was a knock at the door. Zerbinetta jumped and slunk underneath the sideboard. Lily went to the front door to greet Bathilda Bagshot, who lived nearby.

She was carrying a tray of muffins and a bottle of Madam Rosmerta's oak-matured mead. "To toast Harry James Potter, a great wizard of our future history!" Bathilda cried.

Lily smiled and ushered her venerable friend into the living room, where a small table had been set for tea. Bathilda put down the refreshments she brought and said, "I have a gift for Harry. Where is he?"

"Well, he is—" Lily looked perplexed, as he was nowhere to be seen. However, a giggle from above drew her attention and she was astonished to find Harry perched on a high shelf in pursuit of the toy snowy owl, which was fluttering nearby.

James stood beside Lily, equally astonished. "He'll be a great Quidditch player!" the proud father boasted. "He's totally fearless!" He reached up and plucked Harry from his precarious seat.

"James! I thought you were watching him!" Lily remonstrated, "He could've hurt himself!”

"Harry?" scoffed James. "He's bulletproof! Did you see how he just sat there, not scared, at all?"

"Because he's a baby, James! Honestly! You amaze me! We are adults, we should know better."

"Sorry, luv," murmured James contritely, "Won't happen again."

"I'm sorry Bathilda."

Don't worry, dear," Bathilda chuckled. "You should know, though, that this isn't unusual behavior for wizard children to show their magical abilities at such an early age. But..." she paused. "He seems earlier than most!" The proud parents beamed with joy at their child. Harry grinned back. Just then, another knock sounded at the door.

"That must be Emmeline. She said she'd be dropping by to wish Harry a happy first birthday."

"I'll let her in," said James hurriedly. "You keep an eye on Harry!" he added, with a wink.

"What cheek! If you didn't lose him in the first place— Emmeline! Come in! It's wonderful to see you!" said Lily enthusiastically.

"It's nice to see you," Emmeline agreed as James ushered her in to join Bathilda.

Lily made the introductions, explaining to Bathilda that Emmeline was someone she'd met through Dumbledore and they'd become good friends. Emmeline had been Lily's Maid of Honor and helped her with all the wedding preparations.

"How's the birthday boy, then?" Emmeline asked, smiling at Harry and giving his hand a little shake. "Here's a present for you!"

Harry's eyes lit up at the sight of brightly wrapped package. He took it eagerly and began tearing the paper.

"A book!" Lily exclaimed. "How lovely!"

But Harry took one look, then set it aside, having noticed another present on the tea table. A musical spinning-top was soon twirling around the floor, eliciting squeals of delight from Harry. The adults watched and laughed while Lily took the opportunity to exchange a few words with Emmeline, out of Bathilda's earshot.

"Any news from the Order?"

"Yes, they think Voldemort is trying to recruit a few officials from the Ministry, among other things. It's a pity you had to go into hiding. We could use your help figuring out what to do in case Voldemort successfully infiltrates the Ministry."

A sharp rapping at the door ended their conversation. James went to greet their latest visitor. "Hey, Wormtail! Glad you could drop by! How are things? Padfoot and Moony said they're too busy with Order business right now, but may drop in next week some time."

The newcomer - a short, plump wizard with a pasty complexion - answered in a squeaky voice, "Hello Prongs. It's good to see you... and Harry of course." Peter followed James into the living room, where the others were gathered around the table.

"Wormy!" Lily beamed. "So glad you could make it. Would you like some tea?"

Soon they were all seated, and Peter pulled a small package out of his robes and handed it to Harry.

A small squeaky mouse was revealed as the little boy pulled off the wrapping paper.

When he looked up again, a birthday cake was set on the table, with a dragon-shaped candle burning merrily on top. Harry, bright-eyed and open-mouthed, was entranced by the flickering flame.

"Blow out the candle, Harry, and make a wish," Lily smiled, pointing to the flame.

Harry took a deep breath. As he blew out the candle, the adults cheered. Bathilda started serving the oak-matured mead and Lily cut the cake.

Raising her glass, Bathilda said, "Here's to you, little Harry. The first of many wonderful birthdays, each as joyous as this one, in the circle of loving friends and family, the greatest gift anyone can ever ask for."

Everyone smiled warmly but Peter shifted uncomfortably in his spot.

"We'll have an even bigger party next year, won't we, Harry!" James said, ruffling Harry's hair. "We'll get the whole gang together—"

His words were interrupted by the sound of breaking glass.

Peter's bloodstained hands trembled as Lily asked, "Wormy! Are you all right?"

"Y-yes," he squeaked. "Just under a lot of stress."

"It's alright," Lily soothed. "Things will get better soon."






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  Potteraholic     138
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Potty Five Words: "Harry’s First Birthday"

This story was written from November 6, 2010 to December 12, 2010. Eight writers contributed to the story, which is 2,010 words long. Four of the eight writers posted feedback.

- Potteraholic, Dec 12, 2010 3:07 pm[/a]: Story #131 is up! I almost called this story "The Precious Party", but then I thought that title was too... precious. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 464751818 So I erred for the more sturdy and objective, "Harry's First Birthday". Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2752390508

I know this word was used a few times in various post comments while writing this story, but it was a bittersweet experience, writing about what could have been for the young Potter family. I think we did a good job, with only a couple of minor hiccups along the way, of fleshing out details that were in-line with canon. There was a good mix of plot details and characters, interesting gifts were given, and we even managed a bit of foreshadowing in the end.

It'd be interesting to write a story about Lily before she gets married, maybe in her last year of Hogwarts or right after she leaves? We can try to imagine, as Verity had wondered when we first started this story, who were her female friends and what sort of young woman she was. Maybe one day soon, we'll try to write that story.

What did others think of this story? And it was great to see Heironymous Graubart pop in quite suddenly at the end... hope to see you, and others (BB and LPO) again. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2752390508

- Verity Weasley, Dec 13, 2010 11:36 am[/a]: I thought the last story turned out really well. I liked how we incorporated details from canon, such as the toy broomstick, the cat, and Bathilda and Wormy's visits. We took a few liberties too, having Emmeline show up and deciding she'd been Lily's Maid of Honour. Fleshing out Lily turned out to be harder than I imagined, but I think we managed to get to know her a little bit better. I thought the ending, with its foreshadowing and Wormy having 'blood on his hands' was very fitting.

- Julia H., Dec 13, 2010 1:34 pm[/a]: I enjoyed taking part in the last story - it was interesting to mix the canon things with our own ideas. The foreshadowing turned out well

I'm glad that PAH and Verity like that last minute idea about the blood on Peter's hand. Fleshing out Lily ... perhaps a situation with more conflict could have served that purpose better.

In general, I feel that the stories where we do more planning and discussion (plot-wise) tend to be more successful. The writing is more of a team-effort then, too. Like here.

- mona amon, Dec 13, 2010 8:04 pm: The previous story turned out very well. I do not know if we succeeded in fleshing out Lily, but we did flesh out Lily's letter to Sirius very nicely, and the ending, with Wormtail's shattered glass and bloodstained hands was very good.

Fleshing out Lily was a problem for me because JKR has written her as such a Mary Sue. Makes it kind of difficult to add anything to that, except for more boringly perfect stuff.






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Potty Five Words: "The Chronicles of Crookshanks"


Mark Reads 'Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire': Chapter 15 was the inspiration for this story.
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DETAIL LOG
CROOKSHANKS
SUBJECT: HERMIONE GRANGER

DATE: 25 DECEMBER 1994


0730: HERMIONE RECEIVES PRESENTS FROM FRIENDS AND FAMILY. SHE SHARES SOME SPECIAL MUGGLE SWEETS WITH THE OTHER GIRLS IN THE COMMON ROOM. I WAS OFFERED SOME, TOO, BUT THANK YOU, I PREFER TASTY TREATS.

0745: HERMIONE WENT TO SEE THOSE TWO AMUSING BOYS, HARRY AND RON. RON ASKED HER (AGAIN!) ABOUT SOME BALL AND WHO SHE WAS GOING WITH. SHE TOLD HIM TO STOP ASKING.

0830: HERMIONE RETURNED FROM BREAKFAST WITH HARRY AND THE WEASLEYS. I WAS STATIONED IN THE MIDDLE OF THE ROOM, LYING ON MY FAVORITE RUG, WHICH PROVIDED A CLEAR VIEW OF THE FIREPLACE AND ALL THE ACTIVITY THAT WOULD FOLLOW.

0832: A GAME OF WIZARD CHESS BETWEEN HARRY AND RON BEGINS.

0836: RON WINS. I CHASE THE SHRIEKING PAWNS.

0837: I MUST'VE BEEN TOO FORCEFUL IN APPREHENDING THE MARAUDING PIECES, AS HERMIONE DECIDED TO PICK ME UP AND CARRY ME OVER TO THE SOFA. SHE AND GINNY WERE SORTING THROUGH SOME MISSHAPEN KNITTED ELF HATS AND TANGLED BALLS OF WOOL. IT TOOK ME HOURS OF UNROLLING AND SCRABBLING TO GET IT THAT WAY. NEVER MIND.

0839: GINNY FOUND THE MAGIC SPOT UNDER MY CHIN. WHILST RUBBING IT, SHE BEGAN TALKING ABOUT HOW WONDERFUL I WAS WHEN I TRIED TO KILL THAT CONNIVING AND COWARDLY 'RAT', SCABBERS. I THINK I LIKE GINNY.

0845: HERMIONE GOES UPSTAIRS TO GET ME SOME SPECIAL CHRISTMAS TREATS.

0850: SHE HASN'T RETURNED. I GO UPSTAIRS TO INVESTIGATE, AND FIND HER BUSY WITH PRETTY THINGS IN HER WARDROBE. HOW COULD SHE FORGET ME?

0855: HERMIONE BEGINS POWDERING HER NOSE.

0905: HERMIONE IS STILL LOOKING AT HER REFLECTION, HER HAIR ESPECIALLY. I UNDERSTAND GROOMING IS IMPORTANT, BUT FIRST THINGS FIRST.

0906: POUNCED ON HERMIONE'S SHOULDER FROM THE TOP OF THE WARDROBE. HERMIONE WASN'T PLEASED. SHE NEEDS TO PRIORITIZE CORRECTLY.

0910: TREATS SERVED, FINALLY. DELICIOUS!

0920: I SETTLE DOWN ON THE BED I SHARE WITH HERMIONE AND KNEAD IT UNTIL IT'S SOFT. NAP TIME.

1133: A STRANGE NOISE FROM OUTSIDE AWAKENED ME. IT WAS HAGRID SINGING CHRISTMAS CAROLS. REMINDED ME OF THE TIME I LIVED AT THE MAGICAL MENAGERIE WITH ALL ITS INHABITANTS' DISCORDANT TUNES.

1135: I SAUNTER DOWNSTAIRS TO SEE IF THERE'S ANY FOOD. NO LUCK, BUT I SUCCEED IN TRIPPING RON. HE YELLS SOMETHING ABOUT MERLIN AND UNDERWEAR. HERMIONE TELLS HIM TO CALM DOWN. YOU'D THINK HE WOULD BE MORE CIVIL, CONSIDERING HOW I UNMASKED THAT DUPLICITOUS EXCUSE OF A HUMAN BEING, WORMTAIL. MY NEXT HAIRBALL IS DESTINED FOR RON'S BED.

1150: EVERYONE LEAVES FOR LUNCH IN THE GREAT HALL. THINKING ABOUT ALL THAT FOOD MADE ME HUNGRY, SO I SCAMPERED OFF QUIETLY BEHIND HERMIONE, BUT DETOURED TO THE KITCHENS. I MUST HAVE SOME STUFFING. IT IS CHRISTMAS, AFTER ALL.

1200: DOBBY HAS GIVEN ME A VERITABLE FEAST!

1230: I'M STUFFED! I DRAG MYSELF BACK UP TO THE COMMON ROOM FOR ANOTHER NAP.

1245: I SETTLE IN THE BEST ARMCHAIR BY THE FIREPLACE.

1710: I WAKE AND STRETCH. DARKNESS HAS FALLEN OUTSIDE. I HEAR HERMIONE'S FOOTSTEPS ON THE STAIRS SO I PREPARE FOR SOME MUCH-NEEDED SCRATCHING BEHIND MY EARS. UNUSUALLY, HERMIONE IGNORES ME AND RUMMAGES THROUGH THE PILE OF MAGAZINES STACKED ON THE TABLE.

1715: HERMIONE, FINDING THE ISSUE OF 'WITCH WEEKLY' SHE WAS LOOKING FOR, TOOK IT AND DISAPPEARED UPSTAIRS.

1721: I ENTER THE DORMITORY TO SEE WHAT HERMIONE IS UP TO. SHE SEEMS VERY PREOCCUPIED. SHE'S IGNORED ME AGAIN. I JUMP UP ON THE BED.

1723: PLAINTIVE MEOWING FINALLY ACHIEVES A RESPONSE. HERMIONE PICKS ME UP. SHE SMELLS DIFFERENT AND WHEN SHE STROKES MY FUR, IT IMMEDIATELY GETS SMOOTH AND SHINY. I STRUT OVER TO THE MIRROR.

1725: I AM UNSPEAKABLY HANDSOME! I MEAN, I'M QUITE GOOD-LOOKING, GENERALLY, BUT THIS IS SOMETHING ELSE ENTIRELY. HERMIONE LOOKS PRETTIER THAN I'VE EVER SEEN HER, BUT SHE DOESN'T SEEM SATISFIED AND CONTINUES GROOMING.

1855: HERMIONE IS CHANGING INTO HER GOWN. SHE HAS BEEN JOINED IN THE DORMITORY BY THE OTHER GIRLS BUT SHE STAYS HIDDEN BEHIND THE LONG CURTAINS AROUND OUR BED.

1950: FINALLY, HERMIONE IS ALONE. SHE EMERGES FROM THE CURTAINS. I BARELY RECOGNISE HER. SHE LOOKS STUNNING! SHE'LL TURN EVERY HEAD!

1952: SHE TAKES ONE LAST LOOK AT HERSELF, THEN TURNS TO ME AND SAYS, 'WISH ME LUCK, CROOKSY.'

2011: FEELING PECKISH. I GO BACK DOWN TO THE KITCHENS.

2016: HAD TO DODGE SOME SNIGGERING SIXTH-YEARS IN THE CORRIDOR FIRST. HEARD LOTS OF LOUD MUSIC COMING FROM THE GREAT HALL. SOUNDED QUITE GOOD, TOO.

2047: BACK FROM THE KITCHENS, I DECIDE TO LINGER FOR A BIT OUTSIDE THE GREAT HALL AND WATCH SOME OF THE DANCING. I LOOK FOR A SUITABLE VANTAGE POINT TO VIEW THE PROCEEDINGS.

2051: FOUND A GREAT PERCH IN ONE OF THE MAGNIFICENTLY LARGE CHRISTMAS TREES IN THE ENTRANCE HALL.

2057: FINALLY SAW HERMIONE. SHE WAS DANCING WITH ONE OF THE GRYFFINDORS... NEVILLE, I THINK. SHE LOOKED LIKE SHE WAS HAVING A... BALL! CHUCKLE, CHUCKLE. THERE WAS A STEADY STREAM OF DANCERS SWIRLING AROUND THE HALL, AND COUPLES DISAPPEARING INTO THE COURTYARD.

2112: HERMIONE'S DANCING WITH A TALL, DARK STRANGER. SHE'S SMILING BRIGHTLY AT HIM AND LOOKS HAPPY. BEHIND HER, SITTING AT A TABLE, RON LOOKS DISGRUNTLED. I WONDER WHY.

2117: HAGRID TWIRLS BY, DANCING WITH THE LARGEST WOMAN I'VE EVER SEEN IN MY WHOLE LIFE. AND I'VE SEEN SOME PRETTY LARGE WOMEN, MAKE NO MISTAKE!

2132: I YAWN AND DECIDE THIS PERCH ISN'T AS COMFORTABLE AS IT WAS NEARLY AN HOUR AGO. THERE'S ONLY SO MUCH DANCING I CAN WATCH.

2143: IN MY FAVORITE CHAIR BY THE FIRE, I SETTLE IN FOR A NAP.

0004: THE SOUND OF RAISED VOICES INTERRUPTED MY DEEP SLUMBER, WHERE I'D BEEN DREAMING OF A SUNNY GARDEN FILLED WITH FAT, SOMNOLENT MICE. I SAW A LARGE BOWL OF CREAM BEING CARRIED TOWARDS ME BY A BEAUTIFUL FELINE WITH SOFT SILKY BLACK FUR AND LOVELY SHARP CLAWS. SHE WAS ABOUT TO GIVE MY TUMMY RUB WHEN A LOUD NOISE, HERMIONE'S ANGRY VOICE, SCARED HER AWAY.

0007: HERMIONE SEEMS AGITATED. AND RON IS REDDER THAN RUDOLPH'S NOSE. IT SEEMS THEY DISAGREE ON THE PROPER PROTOCOL FOR ISSUING BALL INVITATIONS. RON CLEARLY FELT THAT HE HAD DONE NOTHING WRONG... TYPICAL.

0009: HARRY MAKES GESTURES OF SYMPATHY TOWARDS RON. MEN HAVE TO STICK TOGETHER, I SUPPOSE, BUT WHERE RON IS CONCERNED, I REALLY THINK HARRY SHOULD STAY OUT OF IT.

0010: HERMIONE, HER LOVELY HAIRDO ALL UNDONE, STORMS UP THE STAIRS TO THE GIRLS' DORMITORY. RON LOOKS CONFUSED, WHICH IS USUAL FOR HIM. HIS GOLDFISH IMPRESSION WAS QUITE GOOD, ACTUALLY. MADE ME A BIT HUNGRY, IN FACT.

0011: I GIVE RON MY MOST DISDAINFUL LOOK AND FOLLOW HERMIONE UP TO OUR BEDROOM. SHE NEEDS MY WONDERFUL SNUGGLES AT A TIME LIKE THIS.

0042: HERMIONE'S ASLEEP. I'M... YA-A-A-W-W-WN...






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  Potteraholic   100
  Verity Weasley   89
  Julia H.   8
  mona amon   9
  Phoenixfeather   3
  Hieronymous Graubart     1
  Betelgeuse Black   4
  Phoenixfeather   30
  azi   8

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Total Submissions: 222
Total Words: 1120
Last Submission Date: #2109, Jan 1, 2011 7:36 am, (Potteraholic)
Total Time to Create Story: 20 days, 4 hours, 29 minutes

NOTE 1: While working on finishing the official compiled version of the story, I thought there needed to be one more log entry at the end. (The last post of the story will reflect the later EDITED date/time of Jan 1, 2011 7:36 am rather than the original date/time of Dec 31, 2010 9:57 am.)

NOTE 2: The 10 words preceding the story, listed in bold below, were not originally, submitted as part of the story. At first, they were going to be the title, but then, due to formatting reasons, a shorter title was chosen. Therefore, the following words are included in the word count, but are not attributed to any poster. (There were 1110 words submitted + these 10 other words = 1120)
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DETAIL LOG
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SUBJECT: HERMIONE GRANGER
DATE: 25 DECEMBER 1994






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Post  Potteraholic Tue Aug 16, 2011 6:23 pm

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Post-Story Comments for Story #132, Volume XIII,
Potty Five Words: "The Chronicles of Crookshanks"

This story was written from December 12, 2010 to January 1, 2011. Nine writers contributed to the story, which is 1,120 words long. Four of the nine writers posted feedback.

- Potteraholic, Jan 1, 2011 8:25 am: A few words about this story... I liked having a new format and genre. (Thanks, Mark! Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2752390508) I think it's good to mix things up a bit around these parts, from time to time, especially as over 100 Five Words Stories have been written. Keeps us on our toes. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 464751818 And, now that the holidays are over, hopefully we'll see the 'us' who post here grow a bit in number? optimistic Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2752390508

Writing from Crookshanks' POV was quite fun. Gleaning from JKR's descriptions of his actions and gestures from Book 3 onwards, we can definitely get a sense of his personality, and I think we fleshed him out and gave voice to him in a way that even JKR would approve, if she ever happened to come across this log. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2222139670 I think we wrote an entertaining 'tail'. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 464751818Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2281877974

If we were to ever write another one of Crookshanks' logs, or something similar for another character, the only suggestion I would make is to think carefully about time stamps: 1) they need to be updated frequently, and 2) they need to reflect a passage of time that fits the context/plot.

Just some of the parts I loved in this story:


0832: A GAME OF WIZARD CHESS BETWEEN HARRY AND RON BEGINS.

0836: RON WINS. I CHASE THE SHRIEKING PAWNS. HE YELLS SOMETHING ABOUT MERLIN AND UNDERWEAR Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 1003735042


- Verity Weasley, Jan 1, 2011 9:18 am: It was fun reading the finished story back all in one go. I agree that it was good to try something new, and I think we did a pretty good job of fleshing out Crookshanks' personality. I liked your finishing touch at the end PAH, and there were a couple of other comments I enjoyed that I didn't remember from when we wrote the story - I'm thinking particularly of the 'hairball'! Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 1003735042 I was surprised to see the stats and see that nine writers participated in this story. It certainly felt like very much a two-horse race there at the end! Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 464751818

- Potteraholic, Jan 2, 2011 6:08 am: So... folks, any answers to my earlier question: should we try to write another log again? It'd be great to hear your thoughts. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2752390508

- azi, Jan 2, 2011 6:21 am: I don't mind what we do. Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 2752390508

- Verity Weasley, Jan 2, 2011 9:32 am: I forgot to answer your other question, PAH. Yes, it could be interesting to write another Log type story in the future. Crookshanks is the logical choice, but maybe Buckbeak could be a possibility? Or that might be too difficult.

- mona amon, Jan 3, 2011 6:09 pm: Just read Crooksy's chronicles, which I feel were a great success! Wish I had been able to participate more. I predicted that the story was going to be purr-fect, and I was right! Crookshanks certainly showed a distinctive personality.

My favourite part was Crooksy's dream sequence. Fat, somnolent mice...LOLOLOL! Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 1003735042






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Potty Five Words: "Professor Snape Reports"



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POTIONS
Year 3, June 1994
HARRY POTTER
 

Mr. Potter shows an utter lack of commitment for a third-year student. He has not yet mastered the most basic elements of potion-making. His Shrinking Solution did not succeed due to the unevenness of his cut daisy roots, despite being given numerous reminders that equal length roots were vital to the potion's success.

Mr. Potter must pay greater attention to my directions. His cavalier attitude will prevent him from advancing much further. His grades are currently averaging at 'D' and his behavior, both in and out of the classroom, is absolutely and undeniably delinquent, showing a total disregard for school rules. To improve his conduct, I recommend that he be taken off the Gryffindor Quidditch Team to allow him to focus properly on his studies and his attitude.
 


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POTIONS
Year 3, June 1994
RONALD WEASLEY
 

Mr. Weasley's performance in Potions is a disgrace to this school. He is unable to comprehend the simplest of directions, resulting in dangerous consequences for himself and anyone else unfortunate enough to be in his vicinity. In class, his ridiculous attempt at a Confusing Concoction wouldn't have confused a Flobberworm. His grades are barely hovering above an 'F' and show little sign of improving.

Mr. Weasley's attitude in class is insolent and unhelpful. He regularly colludes with classmates to circumvent school rules and is unwilling to assist classmates who require help with their work. Mr. Weasley would do well to remember that he is going to have to work harder to have any chance of improving his potion-making skills.
 


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POTIONS
Year 3, June 1994
HERMIONE GRANGER
 

Miss Granger's work is quite good. She prepares her potions efficiently, although she sometimes has the tendency to distract other pupils with unneeded advice about how to follow already perfectly simple instructions. She needs to give others the opportunity to repair their own mistakes unaided. Miss Granger's written work is of a consistently expansive nature, extensively researched. However, it is unnecessary to write more than has been requested and it could be perceived by some as insufferable showing off.

Miss Granger continues to raise her hand for every single question. She should give others the opportunity to share the limelight. While technically satisfactory, she needs to be more creative when brewing her potions and explore possibilities outside of her textbooks.
 


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POTIONS
Year 3, June 1994
NEVILLE LONGBOTTOM
 

Mr. Longbottom is the most appalling pupil that I have had the misfortune to teach in all my years at Hogwarts. He shows absolutely no flair for the subject and routinely disrupts lessons with his sheer incompetence. His Shrinking Solution was absolutely unsalvageable. He has not managed to concoct a satisfactory potion in this academic year.

Mr. Longbottom seems incapable of following even the simplest of procedures, but he does seem fairly well-versed in potion ingredients and how to cultivate them. This one-dimensional knowledge is the only thing that has kept him from being thrown out of my class. I would suggest that, if he is to continue, he apply the same effort that he does in other classes, especially Defense Against the Dark Arts and Herbology, in mine.
 


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POTIONS
Year 3, June 1994
SEAMUS FINNIGAN
 

Despite attempting to burn down the Potions laboratory a number of times, Mr. Finnigan has shown some satisfactory progress in Potions this year. He has successfully concocted a number of solutions, through diligently following my simple step by step instructions. However, it's imperative that he learn to master more complex instructions in preparation for OWL examinations in two years' time.

Mr. Finnigan's tendency to become distracted has grown over the past three years. This penchant for frittering away valuable and irreplaceable time will have to be curbed, drastically, in order for him to achieve acceptable results at an advanced level of study.
 


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POTIONS
Year 3, June 1994
DRACO MALFOY
 

Due to an unfortunate injury, Mr. Malfoy was not able to partake fully in most Potions activities earlier this year. Naturally, this circumstance affected his grades, although they are highly commendable. He has overcome considerable pain and distress to achieve the required progress. However, if he wishes to push himself to even greater heights in this subject, I am willing to provide him with individual tuition. He has the ability to become a very skilled Potions expert through dedication and perseverance.

Mr. Malfoy's behavior in class is second to none, setting a fine example to his classmates. He is polite to his teachers and shows leadership in all aspects of school life.
 


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POTIONS
Year 3, June 1994
VINCENT CRABBE
 

Mr. Crabbe continues to make progress in Potions through a combination of practice and steadfast determination. However, he needs to work harder on preparing ingredients more carefully and measuring them accurately as well as following instructions properly, in the correct sequence. His written work is frequently substandard, the handwriting appearing similar to faded rune markings. I recommend that he try to practice his joined-up writing over the holidays. As for the content of his essays, Mr. Crabbe should refrain from elaborating on details unrelated to the assigned topic.

Mr. Crabbe's behavior is usually of an acceptable standard, although he has a tendency to distract other students with his comments about Quidditch match results. Mr. Crabbe needs to understand that Potions class is neither the place nor the time to be discussing such matters.
 


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POTIONS
Year 3, June 1994
GREGORY GOYLE
 

Mr. Goyle's potion-making skills have shown little improvement over the course of the year. He regularly struggles to grasp the meaning of simple instructions and sometimes confuses different potions ingredients. I strongly recommend that he work harder to learn the shapes and colors of commonly used ingredients. This would prevent accidents such as that which occurred in April, when he inadvertently turned his classmate's hair bright blue when he ingested it, a condition which took some weeks to remedy. Mr. Goyle's essays were rarely handed in on time. Numerous detentions have had little effect on his timeliness.

Mr. Goyle's conduct has often been unbecoming of Slytherin, showing scant evidence of any ambition. As his Head of House, I would like to emphatically point out that his contributions towards the House points total has been woefully meager. Mr. Goyle must do more to uphold the reputation of our most illustrious house.
 


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POTIONS
Year 3, June 1994
PANSY PARKINSON
 

Miss Parkinson has worked diligently this year, as she has in her previous two at Hogwarts. If she continues to make progress, she will undoubtedly achieve at an acceptable level. Homework assignments are always handed in on time, and fairly well researched, although the border decorations, I'd say, are somewhat superfluous. Unadorned essays are the standard I expect from my students, including Miss Parkinson.

In class, every student is required to cooperate with their classmates, and Miss Parkinson has helped others to correctly interpret the instructions given, in a way that fosters independence. She doesn't just 'fix' the problem; she provides constructive criticism to those who are less talented despite their attempts. Other students look to Miss Parkinson for social guidance and leadership, which she is inherently adept at. She provides freely, and often.
 


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POTIONS
Year 2, June 1994
LUNA LOVEGOOD
 

Miss Lovegood has demonstrated a fairly good knowledge of potion ingredients, but has a tendency to deviate from the assigned task and try to create her own concoctions. While creativity is an essential part of the potion-making process, Miss Lovegood should remember that inventiveness isn't enough to ensure success. Restraint must be shown to prevent unintended consequences.

Miss Lovegood would do well to remember how easily experimentation can be dangerous or even fatal. Her frequent reports about the 'Crumpled-Horn Snorkacks' and 'Wrackspurts' are a frequent and unnecessary distraction during lessons. It would behoove Miss Lovegood to remain attentive when procedural directions are given. However, she remains exasperatingly optimistic despite numerous, and quite disastrous, Potions failures.
 


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POTIONS
Year 2, June 1994
GINEVRA WEASLEY
 

Miss Weasley has demonstrated considerable progress since last year. Her potions have become recognizable at last and her homework is now focusing on the assigned topic. Last year's unfortunate business aside, Miss Weasley has shown improvement in her ability to concentrate and perform the necessary steps for preparing potions ingredients, something that is sadly lacking in her classmates, as a whole.

Miss Weasley does, however, need to rein in her tongue and keep her opinions about the purpose of Potions homework to herself. The other students often seem to follow her lead, which wastes valuable time. I also suspect she may be responsible for several incidents involving mysteriously exploding potions in her unsuspecting fellow students' cauldrons. She needs to control her temper and learn to respond appropriately to her fellow classmates, Slytherins especially.
 


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POTIONS
Year 5, June 1994
FRED WEASLEY
 

As in the previous years, Mr. Weasley has demonstrated a natural facility for potion-making despite an apparent lack of study skills. If this natural ability was supplemented with some discipline and effort, I am sure he could have a promising future as a potioneer. As it stands, his grades are average, at best, and he spends far too much time in class working on unauthorized creations that are not included in any Potions curriculum. Why would he try to produce a love potion in class when there were O.W.L.s to prepare for?

Mr. Weasley continues to hold court in class, entertaining his classmates with practical jokes and preventing them from concentrating on the work assigned. Docking points from his House does little to discourage these antics. Perhaps full-day Saturday detentions will help.
 

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Year 5, June 1994
GEORGE WEASLEY
 

Mr. Weasley produces potions of an acceptable standard, although he has the potential to do much better. His homework is always punctual, but he tends to produce written work that is heavy on fanciful wordplay, or requires a mirror spell to read, and light on accurate facts. He has shown occasional interest in the finer points of potion-making and it will be good if he could sustain this interest and apply it consistently to his O.W.L. studies, especially if he wishes to continue with Potions at the NEWT level.

Mr. Weasley frequently distracts his fellow students with childish nonsense like practical jokes and this has wasted class time. Quidditch commentary also has no place in lessons, particularly when potions ingredients are being prepared. Greater attention should be paid to the work at hand.
 


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Year 7, June 1994
PERCY WEASLEY
 

Mr. Weasley has been an extremely conscientious student this year, like he has been for his entire school career at Hogwarts. He was always well-prepared and followed directions precisely. His ingredient preparation is always meticulous but on occasion, he has been hindered by inferior equipment. For instance, when preparing his Draught of Living Death last term, patchy cauldron thickness resulted in half-prepared potion seeping through, rendering several students' shoes unusable, and it caused the wearer to lapse into sleep. It was beyond Mr. Weasley's control, but he failed to notice in time to prevent the potion from spreading quickly. This resulted in a reduction in marks despite the objections of the other students. Constant vigilance is an absolute necessity in the Potions laboratory, and my recommendation, if Mr. Weasley wishes to rise to the pinnacle of his full potential, is he should get a thicker cauldron and use better quality equipment, in general. Mr. Weasley's written assignments — essays and laboratory reports — have considerably improved since he was a first-year. Following my suggestions has enabled him to compose thorough, well-researched essays and organized, accurate reports, consistently and on time. He should do well in future endeavors if he maintains his ambitious tendencies.

Mr. Weasley, being a Head Boy, has been expected to maintain order and administer discipline. For the most part, he has been successful, but his overzealousness on occasions has alienated some students, causing an unnecessary distraction in class. Head Boys are not teachers and should realize the limits of their authority. Mr. Weasley would do well to remember that in his future career, for which I wish him the best.
 






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Post  Potteraholic Tue Aug 16, 2011 6:40 pm

These stats were first posted by Potteraholic - Jan 23, 2011 8:31 am (#2503 of 2795) on the World Crossing home of the 'Harry Potter Lexicon Forum'.

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Statistics for Story 133
ordered by first contribution to the story

  User
  # of Submissions  
  Verity Weasley   114
  Potteraholic   118
  azi   69
  mona amon   23
  Julia H.   40
  Betelgeuse Black     7
  Phoenixfeather   17
The user in red is the rightful starter of the next story. They are welcome to pass on the privilege to the user who posted the second most number of times, who may in turn pass it to the user who posted the third number of times in the story, and so forth.

Total Submissions: 387
Total Words: 1935
Last Submission Date: #2501, Jan 16, 2011 7:11 am, (Potteraholic)
Total Time to Create Story: 14 days, 21 hours, 53 minutes






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Post  Potteraholic Tue Aug 16, 2011 6:41 pm

These post-story comments were first posted by Potteraholic - Jan 23, 2011 8:33 am (#2504 of 2795) [Edited Mar 2, 2011 9:43 am] on the World Crossing home of the 'Harry Potter Lexicon Forum'.

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Post-Story Comments for Story #133, Volume XIII,
Potty Five Words: "Professor Snape Reports"

This story was written from January 1, 2011 to January 16, 2011. Seven writers contributed to the story, which is 1,935 words long. Two of the seven writers posted feedback.

- Verity Weasley, Feb 16, 2011 11:33 pm: I enjoyed reading Snape's reports again. The long break before posting meant that I'd forgotten a lot of what we had written, so it was like reading them 'fresh'. I think we did a really good job of finding the balance between expressing Snape's true feelings about a student, coupled with the necessary teacher's restraint. I also think we captured the personalities of the individual students well, such as Luna's optimism and creativity. There was something in Goyle's report which didn't quite make sense to me - it sounded as though he'd been eating his fellow student's hair, which I'm sure wasn't the intended meaning! Finally, I have to mention that PAH did a fantastic job with the layout of the reports. They look very official! Smile

- Julia H., Feb 17, 2011 1:53 am: I enjoyed rereading the reports, too, and I loved the layout! Great job, PAH! Smile






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Post  Potteraholic Tue Aug 16, 2011 6:55 pm

This post was originally made by Potteraholic - Oct 9, 2010 1:30 am (#1255 of 2620)



Potty Game: Five Words!


Five Words is five years old today! It happens some time on October 9, 2005, even though the first ever Five Words post, written by the thread’s creator and Compiler Emeritus, Finn BV, clocks in on October 10, 2005, 2:17 am. The time discrepancy is due to the fact that the Forum clock has changed at various times over the past four years, recalibrating the time stamps on many posts here. Note: All the anniversary smileys are care of Finn, from his previous anniversary messages. Just wanted to keep the anniversary post looking somewhat the same! Smile

The following are the words of the inimitable Finn and can be found in these three previous anniversary messages: Year 1, Year 2 1/2, and Year 3.

Since our existence, we have had dozens of members of the Harry Potter Lexicon FanFiction Forum partake in this simple yet endlessly enjoyable game. In the game, there are no boundaries, save that you must add five words, no more and no less (though there are always mistakes), to your post that continue the story told through other members' five words. Strung together, the five words will make a much, much longer story.

Please take some time to reminisce about the history of the Five Words from our 1-year birthday celebration of October 9, 2006. This little tidbit, once again, is STILL true, to the best of my knowledge… : We invented the "Potty Five Words Crown," given to the poster who held the record for most number of posts in a story; the crown, I believe, is still currently retained by Tazzygirl (Kristina), with a thrilling 176 posts in the story "Just Another Week at the Ministry" on April 23, 2006.

—Finn BV, October 10, 2008, 4:08 a.m.


I started playing Five Words nearly 3 years ago and am so glad that Finn started this thread way back in October 2005. I wish I had been here from the start, but am happy to have found this thread in November 2007. I have had so much fun playing this game over the past 2 years, participating in the creation of some truly entertaining and amazing stories which have delved into all corners of the HP universe. In January 2008, I started helping out Finn and Tazzygirl with compiling some of the stories and posting the official stories and statistics online. Compiling a story involves typing it up, checking it for grammatical and spelling errors, counting its words, tallying its statistics, and formatting it correctly. In the summer of 2008, while I was abroad for much of the summer, PatPat came on board, helping out with the various compiling duties, as Finn and Tazzygirl's schedules made it difficult for them to participate in and monitor the thread as frequently as they had done in the past. In October of 2008, Finn "formally pass[ed] over reins of the thread" to me and it was around this time that Kip asked PatPat and me to become Hosts/Moderators on the FFF.

PatPat has been an invaluable help here on Five Words. I can't imagine the years 2008 to 2009 without her sage advice and thoughtful feedback about various changes introduced in that time. And, of course, I must thank Kip Carter for all his kind support through the years I have been a Five Worder. Thanks, Kip, in the good old days, for always updating the header whenever I put in a request in the 'Questions to the Host' thread, for making many edits to my posts as requested, and for thinking that I was *gulp* Host/Moderator material.

And now, as we reach the fifth year of Five Words, traditions calls for us to play ultimate Five Words. What's that, you ask? For this entire story, instead of posting the customary five words, we get to play more words! How 'bout we post... SEVEN WORDS! That's right! Why 7 words?

As this is the year the 7th HP movie opens, I thought... that's it! Seven! Seven words to coincide with the 7th movie. (It would've been magic if this was the 7th year anniversary of Five Words, but one can't have everything. Wink)

In the past, we've gotten to play 10 words, 12 words, and even 15 words! We couldn't just keep going at that rate, could we? Imagine 20 (25, 30, 35...) words at a time?

So, let the festivities begin, and thank you for staying by Five Words!

—Potteraholic, Oct 9, 2010 2:30 am






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Post  Potteraholic Tue Aug 16, 2011 7:14 pm

This page contains a list with links to all the stories written in Volume XIV.

Five Words Stories - Volume XIV

• Click on Story #134 (24 April 2011) for "The Journey From Nine and Three-Quarters: As Retold by Harry and Company"

• Click on Story #135 (11 May 2011) for "The Picture of Walburga Black"

• Click on Story #136 (10 June 2011) for "Fred and George: Gallivanting First-Years"

• Click on Story #137 (23 June 2011) for "'The Daily Prophet' - Today's Horoscopes"






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This page contains a list with links to all the stories written in Volume XV.

Five Words Stories - Volume XV

• Click on Story #138 (17 July 2011) for "The Chronicles of Crookshanks: Meeting the Beast"

• Click on Story #139 (28 Aug 2011) for "A Moste Potente Hallowe'en"

• Click on Story #140 (29 Sept 2011) for "Professor McGonagall Reports"

• Click on Story #141 (29 Oct 2011) for "A Minister's Musings"






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Post  Potteraholic Thu Aug 18, 2011 3:07 pm

Using Contractions (Dialogue vs. Narrative)

Use contractions (I'm, I'll, it's, he's, etc.) in dialogue as much as possible; it is more realistic. Most people use contractions when they speak. Also, you will use 1 word instead of 2, which saves on a word. In my experience, people only use the expanded form of contractions in dialogue to emphasize something.

Using the 'uncontracted' form of words is usually what happens in narrative sentences ('he would' instead of 'he'd', 'they are' instead of 'they're', etc.), but the occasional use of contractions is fine, I should think.

Contractions help keep our sentences concise and simple, as does specific vocabulary. We'll be able to get more plot and details in our stories if we try and go for brevity of word choice whenever possible.

If you want to add a contraction ending, like 'll to 'he' at the end of a preceding post, for example, that's fine. The 'll will not count as a new word, but will be considered part of the preceding word. The same is true for a possessive ending like 's to 'Harry', for example.

* Please remember to use apostrophes (') in contractions and possessives. *

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Post  Potteraholic Thu Aug 18, 2011 3:22 pm

Other 'Dialogue' Words - Synonyms for 'said'

Looking for another word to use besides 'said'? Have a look at the chart below and see if you can find just the right word to use.


List of synonyms for 'said':

 
  general 
  in a
  happy way
 
  in a
  sad way
 
  in a
  bossy way
 
  in an
  angry way
 
in a
  frightened  
  way
  added,
  continued,
  stated,
  announced,
  asserted,
  commented,
  declared,
  observed,
  remarked,
  reported,
  explained
  laughed,
  rejoiced,
  giggled,
  joked,
  lilted,
  sang out





  cried,
  agonized,
  bawled,
  blubbered,
  lamented,
  sobbed,
  groaned,
  sniveled,
  wept,
  mourned

  insisted,
  bossed,
  preached,
  dictated,
  professed,
  ordered





  raged,
  miffed,
  seethed,
  fumed,
  retorted,
  thundered,
  blurted




  quaked,
  stammered,
  shuddered,
  quivered,
  trembled






  in a pained way  
 in an
  understanding  
way
    in a
  tired way  
    in a
  begging way 
 
as an answer
in a loud
 or
  a soft way 
  barked,
  cried out,
  cried,
  screamed,
  jabbered,
  bellowed,
  groaned,
  howled,
  shrieked,
  roared,
  grieved,
  wailed,
  yelped
  empathized,
  accepted,
  consoled,
  crooned,
  comforted,
  sympathized,
  agreed






  mumbled,
  struggled,
  emitted,
  wearied









  beseeched,
  begged,
  implored,
  pleaded,
  entreated,
  appealed,
  cajoled






  responded,
  retorted,
  replied,
  rejoined,
  answered,
  acknowledged,
  explained






  shouted,
  boomed,
  hollered




  whispered,
  cooed,
  muttered,
  mouthed


  in a
mean way 
  in an
annoying way  
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  scoffed,
  snickered,
  sniggered
  whined




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Post  Potteraholic Thu Aug 18, 2011 3:45 pm

Capitalizing/Not Capitalizing witches/wizards/Muggles 'rule':

In PS/SS, in the 'Keeper of the Keys' chapter, where Hagrid meets Harry and explains the magical world to him, the words 'witches' and 'wizards' are only capitalized at the start of a sentence, and 'Muggles' is always capitalized. ('Witches' and 'Wizards', with capitals, are used only in the titles of things.) Don't ask me to explain this difference when talking about 2 different sorts of people, when each group should, theoretically, be capitalized; JKR's the only one who can do that. So I'm just going to follow the conventions that are written in the books.

Note: The notes above were written during the writing of Story #124. In any future story, where these 3 words are used (witches/wizards/Muggles), the same conventions should be observed. Thanks!



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Post  Potteraholic Thu Aug 18, 2011 6:39 pm

List of commonly misspelled/words:
(including words that should/shouldn't be capitalized)

- Dark forces, purpose, etc. not dark forces, purpose, etc.
- Floo not floo
- Gryffindor common room not Common room
- house-elf not house elf or House Elf
- Ministry not ministry
- Muggles not muggles
- Mum not Mom (mum when someone is not addressing or referring to their own mother)
- Professor Dumbledore and "He is a professor."
- witches not Witches (only capitalized in titles)
- wizards not Wizards (only capitalized in titles)
- Auror not auror
- Dementor not dementor
- All Quidditch positions are capitalized: Seeker, Chaser, Keeper, Beater
- All Quidditch playing equipment is as well: Snitch, Bludger, and Quaffle.
- Verb Forms of Spells: Apparate, Disarm, Dissaparate, Obliviate, Stun, Summon, etc.
- wizarding money: Galleon, Sickle, Knut



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Post  Potteraholic Thu Aug 18, 2011 7:02 pm

When to Use Italics:

1) When we write the excerpt from Wandering with Werewolves please remember to enclose text for this excerpt in italics, since we will be writing a narrative within a narrative. This is the standard literary convention for such writing. In case there are breaks in between Gilderoy's reading, to describe his gesture, or the reactions of anyone in the room listening to him [the presenter (Zephyr), Clio's assistant (Oliphant) and the WWW's reporter and photographer], just remember to unitalicize and italicize and unitalicize words, as necessary. Quotation marks are not needed around the excerpt's words, unless they are dialogue.

2) When writing internal thoughts, use italics. But quotation marks, either " " or ' ', are NOT needed.

Thanks!

Note:

- The 1st note was written during the writing of Story #123, "The Wagga Wagga Werewolf: A Fantastical Tale". In any future story, where there is a narrative within a narrative, the same conventions should be observed.

- The 2nd note was added during the revision of Story #116, "Neville and the Mandrakes: Mission Possible".



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Post  Potteraholic Thu Aug 18, 2011 9:40 pm

Chart of Five Words Stories' word counts:

This chart was originally created after Story #86, "Filius the Fearless", was posted. It was prefaced by the following comments:

Now, please bear with me while I share some 'technical', for lack of a better word, post-story thoughts. "Filius the Fearless" was yet another long story. Out of the last 5 stories, 4 of them have been over 2,000 words. Just to give you an idea of how this has not been the norm for Five Words, here is a chart of Five Words Stories data:


Word Count in Five Word Stories

  # of words           stories out of 88* so far  
  under 600   6/88
  600 to 999   21/88
  1,000 to 1,399   28/88
  1,400 to 1,799   24/88
  1,800 to 1,999           0/88
  over 2,000   9/88

* There are 86 numbered stories, but two of them #28 and #59, have 2 versions each, hence 88 finished stories.

As you can see, the majority of the stories are under 1,800 words. The shortest stories happened in the first days of Five Words, and most of the stories fall into the 1,000 to 1,800 words range. Let's really try to write a simple vignette, as Finn suggested here in an earlier thread. This way, we'll be comfortably able to write 2 more good-sized stories on this thread before having to open a new one. Thanks, everybody!





Here is an updated chart, as of Aug 18, 2011:


Word Count in Five Word Stories

  # of words           stories out of 145* so far  
  under 600   10/145
  600 to 999   22/145
  1,000 to 1,399   44/145
  1,400 to 1,799   37/145
  1,800 to 1,999   6/145
  over 2,000   26/145

* There are 138 numbered stories, but two of them #28 and #59, have 2 versions each, and there are also 5 'Revision stories', for a total of 145 finished stories.


Word Count in Five Word Stories by Story #

  # of words           Story #s  
  under 600           1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 10, 11, 12, 137
  600 to 999         24, 25, 28A, 30, 31, 32, 33, 35, 37, 44, 50, 51, 52, 53, 56, 61, 71, 81, 97, 98, 99, 114
  1,000 to 1,399         7, 8, 9, 14, 17, 18, 20, 22, 23, 28B, 29, 38, 39, 40, 42, 43, 47, 54, 57, 58, 59A, 60,
  63, 64, 65, 72, 74, 79, 87, 88, 93, 105, 107, 108, 112, 113, 117, 118, 119, 120, 123,
  129, 132, 138
  1,400 to 1,799   15, 16, 19, 21, 26, 27, 34, 36, 41, 45, 46, 48, 55, 59B, 62, 66, 67, 68, 70, 73, 75
  78, 80, 84, 89, 90, 91, 94, 95, 96, 101, 104, 111, 113R, 127, 128, 130
  1,800 to 1,999         92, 102, 110, 116, 133, 136
  over 2,000   13, 49, 69, 76, 77, 82, 83, 85, 86, 100, 103, 106, 109, 115, 121, 122, 124, 124R,
  125, 125R, 116R, 114R, 126, 131, 134, 135

As you can see, the majority of the stories are still under 1,800 words. The shortest stories happened in the first days of Five Words, and most of the stories fall into the 1,000 to 1,800 words range.
- From Story #93 to #99 (a total of 7 stories), a 1,700 word limit was instated.
- From Story #100 onwards, the word limit was raised to 2,000 words.



# of Stories Written by Each Year's Anniversary Date (October 9th, 2006)

 
by the _ anniversary...
 
 
stories written, #_ to #_ :
 
 
# of stories per year  
1st
  #1 to #35 (including 28A and 28B)  
36
2nd
  #36 to #53 (including 59A and 59B)  
19
3rd
  #54 to #91  
38
4th
  #92 to #114  
23
5th
  #115 to #129, including 1 revision story: #124R  
16
6th
  #130 to #138, including 4 revision stories: #113R, #116R, #122R, #114R    
13



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A chapter review from the blog 'Mark Reads Harry Potter':

The following is a chapter review from the blog 'Mark Reads Harry Potter' and can be found at:
'Mark Reads Harry Potter' - http:*//markreadsharrypotter.buzznet.com/user/journal/7333841/mark-reads-harry-potter-goblet/.

The format of this review is what inspired the Story #132, "The Chronicles of Crookshanks".



Mark Reads 'Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire': Chapter 15

Aug 04, 2010

In the fifteenth chapter of Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire, Mad-Eye Moody starts to get weird, Draco Malfoy is schooled again, Hermione continues to be better than everyone, and then....THEN...the students from Beauxbatons and Durmstrang arrive and HOLY ****. Intrigued? Then it's time for Mark to read Harry Potter.

CHAPTER 15: BEAUXBATONS AND DURMSTRANG

DETAIL LOG
HEDWIG
SUBJECT: HARRY POTTER
PERIOD: SEPTEMBER 5, 1994 - OCTOBER 30, 1994

SEPTEMBER 5, 1994

0645: SUBJECT AWAKES TO WRITE ONE SIRIUS BLACK A LETTER. FEW THINGS AMUSE ME MORE THAN A 14 YEAR-OLD CHILD TRYING TO LIE TO SIRIUS BLACK. CRAVING MOUSE.

0652: QUICKLY FLY BACK TO OWLERY SO THAT SUBJECT DOES NOT KNOW I AM WATCHING HIM. WATCH OTHER OWLS STARE AT ME WITH JEALOUSY.

0653: WATCHED SUBJECT SLIP ON OWL POOP. ENDLESSLY AMUSING.

0654: SUBJECT TRIES TO WAKE ME UP WHILE I PRETEND TO BE ASLEEP. THIS IS WHAT SUBJECT DESERVES AFTER SENDING ME TO FIND SIRIUS BLACK. IF OWLS COULD CHUCKLE, I WOULD CHUCKLE.

0655: SUBJECT HAS THE AUDACITY TO SUGGEST USING THAT DUMB WEASLEY OWL, PIGWIDGEON. I'D RATHER EAT MY OWN BEAK OFF. TOUCHE, POTTER. TOUCHE.

0656: I BIT SUBJECT AS A SIGN OF "AFFECTION." AT LEAST THAT'S HOW THE DOLT WILL INTERPRET IT.

0656: LEFT SUBJECT AT HOGWARTS TO LOCATE SIRIUS BLACK. WHO IS PROBABLY TRAVELING. GREAT. A MOVING SUBJECT. REMIND ME TO S**T IN POTTER'S BED SOMETIME.

OCTOBER 30, 1994

0815: RETURNED WITH LETTER FROM SIRIUS. ENJOYED THE WARM WEATHER. NOT EXCITED TO RETURN TO THE OWLERY AND LISTEN TO ALL THOSE AMATEUR OWLS HOOT ABOUT THEIR MEDIOCRE LIVES. MUST TRAVEL MORE.

0816: SUBJECT OFFERED ME BACON RINDS. I'LL TRAVEL AFTER I EAT THESE. OM NOM NOM.

0818: SUBJECT THINKS I DRANK HIS ORANGE JUICE. I DIDN'T. I'VE BEEN HOLDING SOME MICE POOP IN MY TALONS FOR HOURS. JOKE'S ON HIM.

1756: RECEIVED NEWS THAT THE ARRIVAL OF STUDENTS FROM BEAUXBATONS AND DURMSTRANG IS IMMINENT. HOPE THEY DON'T BRING THEIR POST OWLS. NOTHING WORSE THAN UNCIVIlIZED STRIGIFORMES.

1809: STUDENT JUST EXCLAIMED THAT THE BEAUXBATONS ARE ARRIVING AT HOGWARTS VIA DRAGON. MUST REMEMBER TO FIND HER OWL AND INSTRUCT HIM OR HER HOW TO USE POOP AS A SECRET WEAPON.

1810: BEAUXBATONS ARRIVED BY WINGED HORSES. MIGHT CONSIDER CHANGING MY SUBJECT. POTTER WOULD PROBABLY PREFER TO ARRIVE TO PLACES ON THE BACK OF HAGRID.

1811: BEAUXBATONS HEADMASTER STEPS OUT OF CARRIAGE. POSSIBLY MOST BEAUTIFUL WOMAN EVER. DEFINITELY FLYING TO FRANCE AND TELL SUBJECT THAT SIRIUS "MIGHT" BE THERE.

1825: DURMSTRANG STUDENTS ARRIVE ON A SHIP THAT CAME OUT OF THE LAKE. SERIOUSLY CONSIDERING DITCHING HOGWARTS ASAP.

1827: VICTOR KRUM IS HERE. ABANDONING HOGWARTS SOON. AFTER I GET SOME MORE BACON RINDS. MMMMMM BACON.






Editorial note: While I like the format of the log, I don't think Mark's take on Hedwig is right. I find his rendition of her a bit mean and unpleasant, and find her tone off-putting at times. But I do like the format he chose to write about the story from an animal's POV. I always imagined that Crookshanks had nothing but the greatest affection for Hermione, and would think the tone of his log would reflect this sentiment.

So things don't get confusing (What? Here on Five Words? Archive of Five Words Stories - Page 17 464751818), we'll need to include the time, recorded in military style (24 hour clock), as part of our 5 words.



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