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Post  Verity Weasley Sun Aug 07, 2011 7:40 pm

give it to you this

Thanks PAH! Yes, it's the first day of term today, (and youngest son's birthday!). I need to get going. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508
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morning."

"Thanks, Lily. It's brilliant!                


Methinks Sev needs to ask Lily for her help pretty quickish, if he wants her help, or this story might start to d-r-a-g...


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Post  Mona Mon Aug 08, 2011 12:50 am

" He looked up. Lily's companions

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Post  Verity Weasley Mon Aug 08, 2011 5:38 am

had drifted away, so he
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Post  Julia H. Mon Aug 08, 2011 6:00 am

finally plucked up the courage

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Post  Mona Mon Aug 08, 2011 8:43 am

to ask, "Can you come

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Post  Potteraholic Mon Aug 08, 2011 9:10 am

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help me make a potion?                

IMHO, we should actually name this potion soon in the story... as it's just been mentioned in some poster's notes. Sev has never actually said what it is he's thinking of making, and I know he's off to do some research in the library... but does he have any idea? Narrowed down the choices in his head? Reading over the story so far, it seems like he's got some notion, to me at least. We need specifics, folks. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508 (Vagueness is what makes a story drag.)
Potteraholic wrote: I wonder if we'll finish this story before the start of term at Hogwarts. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 464751818
I just realized, with the 5 of us who are currently posting, some big things are happening: packing/moving to a new home/new country and/or starting school, going on holiday, spending time with family after an absence... so maybe this story will be finished when Pottermore is open to one and all. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508 Would be quite fitting, when Sev gets to attend his first Slug Club do. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 464751818Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 1003735042Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 266347159


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Post  Julia H. Mon Aug 08, 2011 9:22 am

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"Anything you want," Lily smiled


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Sorry, I couldn't resist. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2222139670

PAH, I've followed your idea.


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Post  Potteraholic Mon Aug 08, 2011 9:28 am

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. "Which one?"

"Well," Severus began,                


Edit: Julia, I wanted to get going with the story... but you could always have: "Anything you want," Lily smiled. Just an idea. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508

Off to work on the next update.
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Post  Julia H. Mon Aug 08, 2011 9:32 am

"it's called Elixir to Induce

.. Euphoria
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Post  Potteraholic Mon Aug 08, 2011 9:39 am

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Euphoria."

"Okay," Lily answered. "Why                


No probs. Mona. Smile

Okay, Julia, re: 'smiled Lily.' Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508 Also, did you see Denise's message here in the 'Efforts to Archive' thread? You should take a look. cyclops

I hope someone else drops in to post in this section, as this Euphoria potion idea is not really fixed firmly in my mind, and I don't want to write stalling posts. I know there's plenty of explanation about it, so I'll just leave it to those who are more set with it than I am.

I will edit it an update here in a bit, in case anyone needs it, then I'm off to finish reformatting Volume X's stories. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2222139670

Verity, I love your new pic... the proud author with her first literary baby! bounce
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Post  Julia H. Mon Aug 08, 2011 10:13 am

do you think you need

Lexicon info:

ingredients: includes a sprig of peppermint in the Half-Blood Prince's version

Effect: Induces euphoria in the drinker, with occasional side effects of excessive singing and nose-tweaking (the peppermint would tend to counterbalance that effect) (HBP22)

When correctly made, the potion is sunshine-yellow (appropriate, being a colour suggestive of cheerfulness) (HBP22)

Instructions to brew this potion can be found in Advanced Potion-Making (HBP22)


This is one of the potions the HBP improved with an idea of his own, so he probably made it at some point. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2222139670

Thanks, PAH! Now I have to choose a house. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508
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to make it? Slughorn hasn't                

Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 3845856932 Julia.

Okay, I need to clarify something for the update. Are they still in the Great Hall? Or did Sev make it to the library, and then saw see Lily and the others there later, by coincidence?

This is the section in question:


Severus' thoughts were interrupted by a loud clatter behind him. Someone had dropped a goblet of pumpkin juice. Sticky, orange fluid was rapidly staining the tablecloth, and Severus watched its progress absentmindedly. He smiled slowly, the answer unfolding in his mind, like a tapestry. What solution could make that completely obtuse Slughorn agree to my wishes? Perhaps... a potion? I could surprise him with a bottle of mead? To which I've added a drop of... what? Leaving his half-finished lunch, Severus hurried to the library to look up a recipe. * As he walked to the double doors, he heard someone shout his name. It was Lily, with a bunch of Gryffindor girls and fellow Slug Club members. He waited awkwardly as the group approached. He wished Lily would just hurry up and ditch her entourage.



Severus' thoughts were interrupted by a loud clatter behind him. Someone had dropped a goblet of pumpkin juice. Sticky, orange fluid was rapidly staining the tablecloth, and Severus watched its progress absentmindedly. He smiled slowly, the answer unfolding in his mind, like a tapestry. What solution could make that completely obtuse Slughorn agree to my wishes? Perhaps... a potion? I could surprise him with a bottle of mead? To which I've added a drop of... what? Leaving his half-finished lunch, Severus hurried to the library to look up a recipe.

As he walked to the double out the library doors, he heard someone shout his name. It was Lily, with a bunch of Gryffindor girls and fellow Slug Club members. He waited awkwardly as the group approached. He wished Lily would just hurry up and ditch her entourage.


If I add a paragraph break after recipe *, then it makes it seem that he's gone to the library, done his research, and found the recipe for the potion. Without it, it's a bit unclear where everyone is, to my mind. I'll leave it without a paragraph break now, in the update, but would appreciate others' thoughts. Thanks.

story update #6

EDIT: Inserted a paragraph break and changed some words to clarify the setting. The original words were in my post here.


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Post  Verity Weasley Mon Aug 08, 2011 10:43 am

taught us that one yet


I vote for the paragraph break. It helps to move the story along.

Snape probably made this potion several times before he modified the instructions in Advanced Potion Making. Perhaps Slughorn suffers frome excessive singing as a result of this first attempt. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 1003735042

Thanks for the comment on my picture PAH. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508 It was taken on Saturday at our Thai cooking class, hence the apron. I had taken a copy along to lend to one of the English teachers.
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Post  Julia H. Mon Aug 08, 2011 1:09 pm

. Do you want to drink

Sev has been looking gloomy today. Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2222139670

LOL, Verity!

I like the paragraph break, too. In that case, they can start making the potion at once. I'm in a hurry! Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508
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Post  Potteraholic Mon Aug 08, 2011 9:20 pm

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it? Are you feeling blue?               

Okay, then! Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508 The paragraph break is in, and I changed some words to clarify the setting. Explanation here.

Volume X is up! Another great volume where we stretched out creative writing muscles: the Marauders when Lily and James were married (with Lily and Petunia as young mothers), a Molly-Arthur-Rita Skeeter love triangle(?)Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 266347159, a Dean and Seamus adventure in Greece, The Dursleys in DH, Hermione working at the Ministry, The Weasley clan at Easter circa The Epilogue, a pre-Hogwarts Neville, and a Granger family outing. Volume X was also the first time Kip played Five Words! bounce


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Post  Mona Tue Aug 09, 2011 12:43 am

"

"No," he laughed, "I don't


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I must remember to read the Molly-Arthur-Rita love triangle one when I get the time. It sounds intriguing! Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2222139670
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Post  Potteraholic Tue Aug 09, 2011 6:29 am

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need it. But I thought                
Julia H. wrote:I like the paragraph break, too. In that case, they can start making the potion at once. I'm in a hurry! Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 2752390508
If they're going to start making the potion together, I reckon Sev needs to tell Lily outright, in no uncertain terms, what his plans are for it re: Slughorn. We are nearing 1100 words and it's time to get going with the main plot of this story. This does not need to be a 2,000 word story Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV) - Page 20 793915934, esp. at the current pace it's being written.
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Post  Mona Tue Aug 09, 2011 7:29 am

I'd slip some to Slughorn
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Post  Verity Weasley Tue Aug 09, 2011 9:51 am

and try to persuade him
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Post  Mona Tue Aug 09, 2011 10:02 am

to include me in the
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Post  Julia H. Tue Aug 09, 2011 10:16 am

Club. I think I deserve

Perhaps he feels it necessary to justify the idea.
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Post  Verity Weasley Tue Aug 09, 2011 10:26 am

to be a member and

Yes, Lily might need a little bit of persuading that it is a harmless plan in order for her to go along with it.
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Post  Mona Tue Aug 09, 2011 11:57 pm

Slughorn likes me already. The
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Post  Verity Weasley Wed Aug 10, 2011 7:45 pm

potion will just put him

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It's been a while without a post, so I thought I'd add a hint just in case folks were stuck.
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