Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV)

regularly if the improvement is

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I'm happy to do another report. I'm not sure how many words we'll need for my story idea - it's just a vague idea at this stage - but I'm sure we can work with however many words we have!

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    be ever diligent and practice

{for such a young witch!}                

She is keen to answer questions in class and is the only student I've ever taught who has managed to successfully turn a tiny flower pot into a large, beribboned tea cosy on the very first attempt! Quite a remarkable achievement for such a young witch!

YAY!!! So report #10 is on... any other ideas on a subject? Maybe another girl would be nice, since we just have Hermione's. Padma Patil, perhaps.

EDIT: To save this post, I inserted the words in blue above into an earlier post.

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PAH, in your last post, you accidentally repeated your previous five words. I'm continuing Verity's five words now. You can probably still edit and use your last post when you visit the forum again.

to be sustained.

Mr Goyle's ... written assignments?

Number of remaining posts?

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    rather cursory and is rarely                

We haven't noted any late assignments by anyone yet, so I thought why not Goylesy?

Lavender sounds good to me!

OOPS! Sorry 'bout that, Julia! I guess what happened is: I usually just copy and paste my previous post to write my next one, then change the five words and comments as necessary. But while I was doing that, I received a phone call from a school colleague and while talking to her — and catching up on all the school gossip — I lost track of what I was doing and just pressed 'send'. So much for multi-tasking!

I'll figure out a way to use that post somewhere else in one of the previous reports, maybe 's

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handed in on time. His

Still in the process of choosing the Featured Story...

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handwriting is often illegible or

How about spelling?

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    his spelling is unfathomable; one                

... or the other?

I had a look at Snape's reports to see what he wrote about Goyle and guess what?

Mr. Goyle's essays were rarely handed in on time. Numerous detentions have had little effect on his timeliness.

So he's consistently the fashionably late one. We might need to go over by 1 or 2 posts for Goylesy's behavior section. Then on to Lavender!

I've inserted 'for such a young witch!' (my new five words from my earlier gaffe) into this post.

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with others, Mr Goyle frequently

Nice about Severus's and McGonnagal's reports coinciding about something.

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OK, this is my choice for Featured Story of the Week - "Lost and Found"

I chose this story more or less at random. I thought it was short and satisfying. The sentences flow well, and the personalities of the three girls come out well in the dialogue. While it doesn't have those brilliant touches that pop up in quite a few of our stories, neither does it have the dragging parts that also pop up in a lot of our stories , probably because it's so short.

I like the five-wordsy way in which it starts off as one thing and ends up as something completely unexpected. It's a good thing we didn't make the Black household all dark and foreboding, and that the kitchen was a cheerful place with burnished copper pots and pans. That leads a touch of authenticity to the tale.

I suppose, since it started off with all three sisters, Bella and Cissy could have had a bit more of a role to play. We dropped them unceremoniously rather early in the plot, but on the whole the story was a nice little peek into life in the Black household on a particular day.

appears to be uninterested in

I know that deep down Snape and McGonagall have more in common than meets the eye!

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things like teamwork and communication

LOL, Julia!

BTW, I edited in my choice of story for FSOTW in my previous post. You may have missed it since you posted soon after.

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I'm sure he hasn't won that many for b/c of this behavior.

Great choice, Mona! Will read it and comment in a later post.

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    BROWN - Miss Brown is a(n)                

Off to read 'Lost and Found'!

Page 58!

EDIT: 'FSOTW' #3 - Mona, it's fitting that you chose a relatively short story as we near the end of this thread, Volume XV, since 'Lost and Found' was a volume-ending story, with a limited number of posts. That accounts for its relative brevity. I. too, have a vague recollection of this story and wish I could remember who had the idea for the source of the ticking noise... I do remember that I came up with the house-elf's name, as well as the wee pet bird's.

I think the different personalities of the three Black sisters is firmly established, quite quickly, as Verity said, through dialogue, and while it would have been quite fun to hear more of what Cissy and Bella had to say, their exit from the story makes complete sense in the context of the story: neither of the two are very helpful sorts, and wouldn't be bothered about trying to make Regulus feel better, at least to my way of thinking. They might have made a reappearance at the end of the story if it could've been longer, but all in all, we got a peek into the life of the Black sisters that was quite entertaining and even quite plausible. I think writing a longer story about the three, including some interaction with their mother and aunt, would really present us with lots of opportunities to flex our creative writing muscles.

EDIT 2: Mona, thanks for your comments about the report I sent.

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'Featured Story of the Week' Comments for Story #81, Volume VII,
Potty Five Words: "Lost and Found"

This story was featured during the writing of Story #140. It was the 3rd 'Featured Story of the Week'. All times listed are EST.

- Mona, Sept 23, 2011 9:44 am: I chose this story more or less at random. I thought it was short and satisfying. The sentences flow well, and the personalities of the three girls come out well in the dialogue. While it doesn't have those brilliant touches that pop up in quite a few of our stories, neither does it have the dragging parts that also pop up in a lot of our stories , probably because it's so short.

I like the five-wordsy way in which it starts off as one thing and ends up as something completely unexpected. It's a good thing we didn't make the Black household all dark and foreboding, and that the kitchen was a cheerful place with burnished copper pots and pans. That leads a touch of authenticity to the tale.

I suppose, since it started off with all three sisters, Bella and Cissy could have had a bit more of a role to play. We dropped them unceremoniously rather early in the plot, but on the whole the story was a nice little peek into life in the Black household on a particular day.

- Verity Weasley, Sept 23, 2011 11:13 am: That's an interesting little story you chose to feature Mona. I had a vague memory of it, but it was good to re-read. I agree that the personalities of the three sisters came across quite nicely in the dialogue, and although Bella and Cissy only featured in the first part of the story, it was a natural exit for them. I can just imagine us posting away and someone introducing the idea of the strange source of the noise. Most of us would have been racking our brains wondering what on earth it could be, but one poster came up with the perfect explanation, which fitted in so neatly with the rest of the storyline you would think it had been planned that way all along. Of course we know that is never the case! Great choice Mona.

- Potteraholic, Sept 23, 2011 9:03 pm: Mona, it's fitting that you chose a relatively short story as we near the end of this thread, Volume XV, since 'Lost and Found' was a volume-ending story, with a limited number of posts. That accounts for its relative brevity. I. too, have a vague recollection of this story and wish I could remember who had the idea for the source of the ticking noise... I do remember that I came up with the house-elf's name, as well as the wee pet bird's.

I think the different personalities of the three Black sisters is firmly established, quite quickly, as Verity said, through dialogue, and while it would have been quite fun to hear more of what Cissy and Bella had to say, their exit from the story makes complete sense in the context of the story: neither of the two are very helpful sorts, and wouldn't be bothered about trying to make Regulus feel better, at least to my way of thinking. They might have made a reappearance at the end of the story if it could've been longer, but all in all, we got a peek into the life of the Black sisters that was quite entertaining and even quite plausible. I think writing a longer story about the three, including some interaction with their mother and aunt, would really present us with lots of opportunities to flex our creative writing muscles.

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meet the requirements for the

Have read Lost and Found, will comment later.

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