Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XV)

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the music, his arms twirling                

I'm not sure we have time for gradually, Julia. We're close to 1,600 words already. So I'm speeding things up a touch...

There's still Sluggy's invite to Sev to write. We can go over 22 more posts a bit, but let's try to wrap things up as soon as possible.

EDIT: Hmmm... Euphoric Sluggy and Sev's invite might need more than 100 words. Better make it 200 words... I'll change the 'posts left' update, but we should be judicious with our words/word choice. Thanks!

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noticed Lily and Severus standing                

Ahhh... dodgy internet service. I remember that so well from my last 3 summers in India; the feeling of elation when the wi-fi worked and then... ZAP! It'd be gone! Good to see your post now, Verity, in any case!

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nearby, and he waved to

I keep hoping for some singing and nose-tweaking...

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{, gleefully}.   Skipping over (to) them, he                

I'm inserting 'gleefully' in front of the 'to' in Julia's post, then inserting 'Skipping over' in front of the 'to' she ended her post with. The sentence will read:

A moment later, he noticed Lily and Severus standing nearby, and he waved, gleefully. Skipping over (to) them, he

Go on then, Julia. here's your chance. (Or anything the next poster fancies.) Whatever it takes to get to the invite, and then... the story can be finished!

Update #10 coming up. → story update #10   319 posts and 1,595 words.

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sang a strange, improvised recitative

I thought he would talk to them in this manner.

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that ended when he tweaked                

Okay, the tweaking of something is in! Sluggy seems pretty euphoric by now: a big wink to McGonagall, tapping his feet, twirling his arms, skipping over to Lily and Sev, singing, and now tweaking something. I'd say Lily was pretty convinced by now and starts talking to Sluggy soon, and pops the question. (Any more 'euphoric' behavior from Sluggy, and Lily might think their potion was too potent. Remember, we wrote that she was concerned that this potion would harm Sluggy [updates #7 to #8 for anyone who forgot/missed that section].


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his nose and bowed deeply.

Should there be a word to follow 'recitative'? I'm not sure, but it doesn't sound quite right to me. I would have added one, but thought I'd check first whether others thought it was needed or not.

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The pair bowed in return                

Verity, when I first saw 'recitative', I figured it was a noun, like how 'narrative' can be a noun. When I checked the online Merriam-Webster dictionary definition of 'recitative' before posting my words, I found: noun \ˌre-sə-tə-ˈtēv, ˌres-tə-\ Definition of RECITATIVE: a rhythmically free vocal style that imitates the natural inflections of speech and that is used for dialogue and narrative in operas and oratorios and elsewhere: a recitative is a narrative song I figure the Oxford English dictionary has a similar definition.

So I figured I didn't need to use 'song' and would save up on a word.


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began, "and what wonderful decorations!                

Spoiler:

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, "and I think you'll find                

Very true, Verity! And it sounds like you've got quite the busy week, with all your evening presentations at school. All the best!

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the adornments I've selected for                

Verity, do you have to do anything like recess duty? Or supervise students in any way?

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our own little party tonight

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!"

"I'm so looking forward to                 .

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now or never, thought Lily                

Sounds good to me, Julia, esp. the 'now' part. Maybe she touches Sev's hand, for support?

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She did not even notice

I'm referring to that hand movement. I like the idea.

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how tightly she grasped Severus'                

Hmmm... was not sure what Lily was meant to be noticing with the hand movement, so hope what I have works. I had thought of it as Lily actively seeking Sev's hand for support, or in solidarity, before taking the plunge, so to speak.

On with the story... we're almost at the end! (And maybe we'll do it under budget? )

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hand, instinctively looking for support

I imagined it as an instinctive reaction, that's why I wrote she did not notice.

I wonder how Sev is feeling now...

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. "Professor, I wondered," Lily began                

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would it be all right                

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