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Story #144
Potteraholic Mon Feb 27, 2012 11:42 am
hand outstretched."Headmaster Dippet! It's
Verity!
Hope you {had} lots of fun (and cake)!
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Verity Weasley Mon Feb 27, 2012 7:36 pm
so fortuitous that we should
Thanks for the birthday greeting PAH. I did have cake - a gluten-free chocolate cake that I make in the microwave. Yum!
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Thanks for the birthday greeting PAH. I did have cake - a gluten-free chocolate cake that I make in the microwave. Yum!
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Potteraholic Mon Feb 27, 2012 7:57 pm
meet like this!"The Headmaster
Verity, if gluten-free chocolate cake is anything like flourless chocolate cake, then yum, indeed!
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Verity Weasley Mon Feb 27, 2012 8:51 pm
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- I have a suggestion. This story has been very dialogue-heavy so far. How about we deal with Sluggy's job seeking with some narrative, rather than recounting the conversation. Something along the lines of, 'Ten minutes later, after Horace had regaled him with stories of his potions prowess and his miraculous healing cheese concoction, Professor Dippet found himself offering Slughorn the position of Potions Master at Hogwarts and left the Three Broomsticks feeling rather dazed.'
Of course, it doesn't have to be exactly like that, but if we use narrative instead of dialogue we can get through it a bit quicker and get on to his date with Donna.
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Potteraholic Mon Feb 27, 2012 9:20 pm
towards the empty seat next Count me in! I'm all for getting to that part of the story as quickly as possible!Verity wrote:"... if we use narrative instead of dialogue we can get through it [Sluggy's job-seeking] a bit quicker and get on to his date with Donna.
Let's see if we can get there by 115 posts left (50 words from now).125
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Verity Weasley Tue Feb 28, 2012 12:52 am
to Horace and was soon
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- listening...
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Mona Tue Feb 28, 2012 1:06 am
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- on the miraculous properties...?
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Mona Tue Feb 28, 2012 9:36 am
minutes later, the bemused Headmaster
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- found himself offering...etc.
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Julia H. Tue Feb 28, 2012 10:44 am
position of Potions Master at
I'm glad we all like the narrative solution for this part. I had suggested the same earlier here. Now I look forward to the most delightful part of Sluggy's day. 
Happy Belated Birthday, Verity!
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I'm glad we all like the narrative solution for this part.
I had suggested the same earlier here. Now I look forward to the most delightful part of Sluggy's day. Happy Belated Birthday, Verity!
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Potteraholic Tue Feb 28, 2012 1:49 pm
Great idea, Julia. Dunno how I missed it.Julia H. wrote:I'm glad we all like the narrative solution for this part.
Okay, let's see how quickly we can get this narrative section finished!
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Julia H. Tue Feb 28, 2012 2:10 pm
the Three Broomsticks feeling rather
PAH, you repeated "at" in your last post.
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PAH, you repeated "at" in your last post.
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Potteraholic Tue Feb 28, 2012 4:44 pm
pleased by his sudden good fortune. I get to use 6 words?
Now the narrative section is done! On to the delightful day with Donna! 
We have 500 odd words left in which to do it.114
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Verity Weasley Tue Feb 28, 2012 7:32 pm
Horace turned to Belladonna and
Sorry I missed your suggestion Julia! I remember reading your comment, but the narrative suggestion part just didn't register for some reason! I must have been distracted by the cheese festival!
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Sorry I missed your suggestion Julia! I remember reading your comment, but the narrative suggestion part just didn't register for some reason! I must have been distracted by the cheese festival!
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Mona Wed Feb 29, 2012 12:59 am
winked. "Today's my lucky day
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- isn't it...or something else.
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Verity Weasley Wed Feb 29, 2012 5:21 am
isn't it? New job and
I just spent the day at a gifted and talented literacy day for Bangkok schools, so we all took along a few students to participate in the activities. One of the writing activities was to write a short story, with a distinct beginning, middle and end, using just 50 words exactly. It's very challenging, but great practice at making every word count - just like we do!
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I just spent the day at a gifted and talented literacy day for Bangkok schools, so we all took along a few students to participate in the activities. One of the writing activities was to write a short story, with a distinct beginning, middle and end, using just 50 words exactly. It's very challenging, but great practice at making every word count - just like we do!
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Potteraholic Wed Feb 29, 2012 9:57 am
meeting you here, by chance? WOW! A complete story in fifty words? Would love to see some examples of that.
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Verity Weasley Wed Feb 29, 2012 10:25 am
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"Lucky for me too," Belladonna
For anyone who's interested, here's some examples of the 50 word stories. I've put them in spoiler boxes so you don't have to read them if you don't want to. These were written by students in years 4, 5 and 6, which is the equivalent of U.S. grades 3, 4 and 5. Titles don't count in the word count.
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"Lucky for me too," Belladonna
For anyone who's interested, here's some examples of the 50 word stories. I've put them in spoiler boxes so you don't have to read them if you don't want to. These were written by students in years 4, 5 and 6, which is the equivalent of U.S. grades 3, 4 and 5. Titles don't count in the word count.
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- STOLEN UNDER THE MOON
“Stop! I’ll shoot!” shouted the guard. Moonlight slashed across his face, a silver scar, the thief froze. Throwing his loot across his shoulder like a winter coat, he leaped out the window, agile as a bat. The petrified guard bellowed an alarm. The thief raced away into the black night.
Stress
Oh, I can do this. This is easy. Just a 50 word story isn’t much.
Ok, I’ve started typing. Only 20 words written. 24, 25. Half way there!
30 minutes. That’s so long! Running, running out of words! What am I gonna do?
You decide what happens. I can’t write!
Among the Stars
I lay among the stars. War is hurtful, war is mean. Over the years, I’ve seen many innocent young men run towards Death. Now it’s my turn. Soon Death would be standing over me, handing me over to the conveyer-belt of eternity. I have to go forwards, can’t look back.
TIGER LIFE
As the morning sun peeks through the trees in the jungle, a tiger gives a yawn and wakes up. He is hungry. Stealthily, the tiger creeps out his den and begins to follow an invisible trail. Soon, he glimpses a wild boar. He pounces. Later he will be enjoying meat!!!!
The End
Sunlight pelted down as I woke. It was a wonderful day as usual. Everything looked the same as it was yesterday, but still, something felt wrong inside. As I climbed out of my comfy bed, I gently and silently closed my eyes.
And that was the end of my life.
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replied. "I was feeling blue Those are all so good, Verity! Thanks for sharing them.
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Mona Wed Feb 29, 2012 12:28 pm
, and you cheered me up
Wow, I never realised how short a 50 word story was until I saw the examples! The kids have managed very well indeed.
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Wow, I never realised how short a 50 word story was until I saw the examples! The kids have managed very well indeed.
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Julia H. Wed Feb 29, 2012 4:02 pm
!"
She beamed at Horace, who
Very well written short stories, Verity. Thanks for sharing! It must be wonderful to work with such creative children.
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She beamed at Horace, who
Very well written short stories, Verity. Thanks for sharing! It must be wonderful to work with such creative children.
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Verity Weasley Wed Feb 29, 2012 7:26 pm
felt giddy, but supremely confident
Yes, it is fun, Julia!
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Yes, it is fun, Julia!
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