Potty Game: Five Words (Vol. XVI)

   lake where many small boats                

Can the castle be seen from the lake? Move contamination tells me yes, but I don't have the books with me to check.

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water. I tried to get

...closer... After all, this is an eleven-year-old kid and probably very excited!

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   closer, to board the first                

Okay, view of the castle seen halfway sounds familiar to me, too.

3/5 of the story is now complete!

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boat. The shore was, however,

Spoiler:

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   very slippery, and I nearly                

I made the shore very slippery, so that the reader could infer that it was very wet. So the rest of the story is the boat journey and then we end in front of the castle's doors? In the Great Hall? On the Sorting Hat's stool? I wonder what it will be?

So far, there are 2 post-story comments for the Felix Felicis story. It would be nice to have more.

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   stepped into the second boat                

Verity Weasley wrote:I don't think we'll have enough posts to get inside the castle!

Nor I, Verity. But someone could always come along and surprise us! Unlikely, but still possible!

Maybe this first-year meets the same fate as Dennis Creevey, while crossing the lake? Or something else altogether? We have 6 posts/30 words left in this lake section before we start heading for the conclusion.

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   found a seat in the                

EDIT: I had 5 other words before, but changed them, as they seemed to indicate that our protagonist had remained standing in the boat.

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   , but the boat started moving                

,

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suddenly, carrying us swiftly towards

The castle is visible from the lake. They get their first glimpse of it when they turn a bend in the path leading towards the lake.

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Just read Horace's Lucky Day. Not among our best, I guess. Julia's initial idea was a good one, and I think we succeeded in that part of it at least. Horace certainly has a very nice time, even if the reader of the story doesn't.

   the castle. It looked even                 ... more...

My inclusion of 'even (more)' was to indicate that our protagonist might have caught a glimpse of the castle before boarding the boat.

4/5 of the story is done! And now, time to head towards the conclusion!

And a 3rd set of post-story comments! Dare I hope for a 4th? So I could update the 'post-story comments' post all in one fell swoop?

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   , higher than before.

I jumped                

Just 40 words left!

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with excitement, just as the

OK, here is the fourth set of comments: I'm glad that Mona does not think that the idea was a bad one. I agree that the story could be more entertaining... When I suggested Horace and the Felix Felicis as the subject of the story, I was thinking of a sort of comedy, in which the character's comical potential could be exploited. But we may be a bit too serious people for that - we did not really let Horace defy the usual conventions or use his Slytherin cunning on his lucky day. Oh, well, I'd better leave plot suggestions to others I guess (which I normally do anyway). In any case, we bravely got to the end of the story, and Horace did have a good time...

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   boat reached the shore. I                

Thanks for your comments, Julia! Re: "But we may be a bit too serious people for that - we did not really let Horace defy the usual conventions or use his Slytherin cunning on his lucky day." Dunno, we've written some pretty humorous stories over the years. And I didn't get that idea about us trying to write Horace defying the usual conventions, etc. from your initial posts when the story started, which I thought was were more about how Horace had spent his perfect day. But I wasn't posting as much as I usually do in the first half of the story, so I must've missed those notes. I was more involved in the 2nd half of the story.

Now, on to updating that post-story comments post!

EDIT: Done!

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   here... Hogwarts! The castle doors                

Verity, I'm all for improvising and not planning when we write these stories five words at a time, but I agree, sometimes we need a specific outline to keep things going, especially when the posting pace is very slow, so I jumped in with an outline when the story was nearing the 6 week mark. I was worried the story would go on for another 6 weeks, and go way over 2,000 words! Compiling and tallying the number of posts for that sort of epic is something I wanted to avoid like a case of spattergroit! So, when needs must, posting comments with specific ideas is absolutely encouraged.

Just 20 more words to go!

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   mysterious. I wondered what I'd                 ... see, find, etc.

Just 10 more words to go!

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   I'd have from now on.                

Hope this is a fitting ending! Verity, what do you think? Could you let me know in an edit in your previous post?

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Thanks, Verity! Okay, so I declare Story #145, our first 50 posts/250 words story, officially F I N I S H E D ! The finished story and stats will be posted sometime in the next several days, or so. Possibly sooner, but I can't be sure.

As is customary, this thread will be locked until the official story is posted to conserve posts to maximize this thread's capacity.

Stay tuned!